|Reviews for Ancient Japan|
| Sarah 3/6/13 . chapter 8
So I like the concept that you have, you have some good ideas for this story. But I think you could most defiantly work on your writing skills. I like to read a story with depth, and some great description. I have read almost all the Sesshomaru/Kagome paring stories that are completed, and a lot, like your story don't have a lot of depth and description. Then I get a story, and it's just reels me in, with character development, and plot lines, and story lines, and descriptive writing, and I fall in love with the story. I strongly recommend to slow your story down. Don't be so eager to get to the good points. Develop you characters, and explain what their doing, wearing, standing ect. Also explain what they see , hear, smell, and taste. I'm not a pro and by all means I don't say i am, not by a long shot One thing I completely lack is my punctuality. Using incorrect words like their, there, they're . It's just you have some fantastic ideas and. i know if you slow it down you could have a great well written story. I'm not trying to write this feedback to be mean or cruel. I wanted to give you constructive feedback so you can develop on your writing skills. Hopefully this helps. My login name is CutiePie804 read mine give me some feedback...
| istalkher-shinny 2/7/13 . chapter 19
| CalcBoy91 8/22/12 . chapter 1
short but ok
| HopelessRomantic183 8/10/11 . chapter 3
Well I like the story so far, but it's a bit confusing from the third to fourth chapter sense Ray goes from asking where the bathroom is to waking up in the well. Is chapter three not finished or is one completely missing?
| laSoldier 7/9/10 . chapter 3
Is this chapter not finished or something...? Because it ends abruptly when Souta is telling Rei where the bathroom is...;;
| DeLaLunaLove 2/16/10 . chapter 7
| DeLaLunaLove 2/10/10 . chapter 6
great job with combining both stories
| Bibibiz 12/6/09 . chapter 5
I KNEW IT! I KNEW REI LOOKED LIKE KAGOME, IM NOT CRAZY!
| SNF 9/29/09 . chapter 11
how can kagome have more spiritual power than rei? that does not make sense at all. rei is able to sense evil aura, consult with fire, know how to use the scroll, able to sense all kinds of aura, and bunch of other stuff. kagome can only sense/see the jewel.
| MeilinRei55 9/28/09 . chapter 5
for henshin mars power makeup:
| Dhampire12 8/20/09 . chapter 19
That was really good!
| Princesa de la Luna 6/28/09 . chapter 18
| Princesa de la Luna 6/28/09 . chapter 17
| BeccaRomano 3/31/09 . chapter 6
this is really good but i don't like the part when she explains princess Serenity being killed by beyrl. i like the manga version that she commits suicide when endymion is dead
| serenityrain2233 2/7/09 . chapter 19
great story i so loved it you did an awesome job...