Another delightful chapter. There aren't really any noticable problems with your writing that I could offer constructive criticism for, and your narrative pacing is impeccable. Instead, I'll just wish you the best with your next chapters. And don't feel guilty - this is a great story so far.

A very intriguing and exciting start to a story. I'd love to see where this goes.

I love your story! It's really great. Can't wait till you right the next part...