Reviews for The New Digidestened

Dragontiger96
2007-03-29
ch 2,

abuseAhh, sorry, I clicked the submit button by mistake on the last chapter, luckily there's two. Anyway, lack of spacing between punctuation, disregard of spelling, blocked dialogue, and inconsistent verb tense. From the looks of it, you don’t bother to go through the download manager to recheck your work; actually, it seems that you don’t even go back to reread your work after finishing. I have no problem with short chapters, but if you want it short you should at least put forth the effort to making sure that the chapter comes out the way you want it. Even if you don’t have Microsoft word, there are other free office related products that work just as well. advertises the “Open Office” software, which is compatible with windows and probably with Mac.

As to the story itself, the characters seem very superficial. I can see it’s mostly dialogue oriented, but try adding more feelings and thoughts. I can see your making a attempt at humor, trust me, things may seem funny in your mind, but on paper, it just seems kind of dumb. I find that when it comes to writing, intelligent humor works best, puns and ironies, not foolish actions are pretty much the way to go. The thing about action is that it looks way funnier than it sounds, some things are just hard to communicate through typing, and I think it’d be easier if had more leeway on the types of fonts you could use.

Dragontiger96
2007-03-29
ch 1,

abuseYou know, at one point in time after all these annoying reviews saying that you should correct your grammar habits, a person would think that you would actually make some sort of effort at changing to become a better offer, but every time I come across something you write I see the same mistakes over and over. The lack of spacing between sentences

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