cute story.

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Interesting...a relatively deep analysis of Molly by the two characters who are shown to interact with her on a 'peer' level and never seem to discuss or observe her personality in the same way other characters like Stan, Satis or Rick do. It made a nice change of pace to see their dialogue function as teamwork, Jordan using his earnest, humourous speech patterns to describe, while Aikka interjects with his personal musings. It made for a very sensitive and not entirely unlikely scernio. I was struck by how they thought her 'personal beauty' was 'sad'. It was a very eloquate way to describe her.

But oh, that brief anecdote about the April's Fool thing...it made my heart break for Jordan. You silly, unsociable Molly.

Wow, I really liked that, considering how much of a JordanAikka fan I am. Good job!

THAT WAS SO SWEET!

Hiya Mab, I guess i could say this story was an insight into Jordan and Aikka's already incredably predictable relationship, which it was. I woul;d have thought Jordan could have been a bit more polite toward the end on the story, but i just it's just not him. Unfortunately i hate to point out the fact that in most of your chapters and storys there are quite a few typos, I'm still waiting for chapter 15 of bonds, oh, writing of which, I would like you know if I could use the name 'Canaan' in my oban chapters, before i post them, I would like to know if you could reread them and perhaps give me some ideas on how to improve them. um, email me if you can :)

Yup, this was just as good as an AikkaJordan. ^^ I loved it! Their banter was very realistic for both their characters, in my opinion, and it felt real! :p Molly's mean to Jordan there. Good work in writing this!

I don't see much yaoi in this at all, the closest it might come to is shonen ai. But even so, I enjoyed seeing Jordan and Aikka interacting in a non-violent way. You capture their personalities well and make it seem like they really could be friends. Too bad Molly had to dump them both for them to get it!

yay! I luv it!!
be happy!!
i hate yoai unless there's a tiny hint of it which urs does ^.^
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I hope I didnt insult u TT.TT

Cool... I loved it. It was definetely different to anything else on this fandom (so far). And I mean that it the very best way possible.

WOW. WOW. That...was...AWESOME! GAH! You're so much better at this than I am! I haven't even submitted any OSR fanfics! Wah!

i loved this story. the poor heart broken fools. wow molly can be cruel. oh i promise on a girl scouts honor that i will finish reading you bonds story will either finish tonigh tor tomorrow and yes i am a girl scout 3rd year cadet i've been in girl scouts since first grade i think. anyway bye i promise i'll finish reading it.

Hey that was pretty good, you made both Jordan and Aikka's comments sound like the real thing,...good job