Uhh, not that bad. I would suggest adding more detail, and a bit of explanation, as to why they go every summer? how Calvin met the bully, how the shark got back into Amity...etc. You get my point :) Those little things make the story more interesting, instead of just a shark eating people. JAWS isnt just about an overgrown shark eating people, and thats what most writters dont understand yet about JAWS. I still understand your story, and its not THAT bad :P D.R

Hmm...

7/10. A pretty good story, but not quite there yet. I do, however, suggest writing another chapter to get rid of the suspense. I can assure you that EVERYONE wants to know what happens.

Have Jaws and Hobbes be buddies that went to preadator high or somethin good!