This'll be interesting, update soon k?

Aw it's almost over, sad. I've really been enjoy this story and it's been fun to watch it develop. I hope you keep writing when this is over.
-Morana

Ehh..? No malice, uncly hug? What does *that* mean? o.O He isn't angry for her horrible past and wasn't to help her get revenge?

Keep it coming. xD There aren't a lotta good grammar/spelled ficcies out there. At least ones I dont dislike.

I'm confused about Kohaku's relation to Itachi and Sasuke. You said she was the daughter of Shiori- Itachi's cousin- but then she is refered to as Sasuke's "niece". Wouldn't she be their second cousin? Or is she Itachi's daughter? (You did call Itachi Shiori's scorned lover). I think the story would also be better if there wasn't such an age gap (Itachi is twice Kohaku's age). It would be more relateable if Kohaku was the same age as Sasuke (They can be younger than 24 though). Also, Itachi's growing affection for Kohaku isn't explained. He just suddenly goes from torturing and beating her to not even touching her.

xD I like the 'real men don't rape' bit even if he DID come from the depths of Hell. That was the best part of here. :)

Maybe it's just my current state of chaotic mind but I thought Itachi had been awfully romantic-li-ish.. Though I don't even know what that r word means. >.> M.. mind drifting..

You did it fantastic again timely! There were only a few printed errors at the end and once again your words have brought a clear image and the feeling of the situations that Itachi and Kohaku went through!

... Enough with the formal, so Kohaku never actually met other members of Akatsuki? That sucks, because it would've awefully been amusing to see her squeak seeing Sasori's evil-looing "puppet shell", Deidara's slimy "mouth", and blah blah blah. And is Itachi feeling guilt? Kukuku. And if it's in hospital, then Sakura would be coming out, meeting Kohaku...

Yea! Kohaku is getting more sane-ish and Itachi has a heart!

Yeah! This is getting very good! I hope you keep going!

[nods absentmindedly] Yes, yes, torture can be horrible and all and it usually scars a person for life but that isn't important.

Who is this girl's father? Is she a ninja or 'ordinary' person? I'm going to kill something if she's all 'special' and has a demon monster thing residing inside her body. -.-'

this version is better than the last one. i couldn't really understand some of the characters actions even when taking into account that kohaku was crazy. poor kid. haha sasuke crying. that never gets old.

Gasp! Such tension! What did Itachi do to her!?

I'm a little confused, but your story is very enjoyable.

Great story so far...Keep it up!

I'm enjoying this very much! I can't wait to see where you go with it!