Well, first of all, I like where you're going with this story and how you've detailed all these events so far. But (yeah. the dreaded but), Harry is so angsty really. I wish he'd stop being like that. I know in actuality he's only been like that for a year but with how long this story is, I feel like he's this emo-teenage-adult for a really REALLY long time. His denial of his psychological issues is also really dumb. I thought he had more sense to confront a problem than adopt a defensive, confrontational, full blown denial of said issue.

I hope all this angsty, emo stuff will lessen in future chapters. Anyhow, please don't take any offense! I assure you, none was meant!

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE...SON! Please?

This story is awesome, I love this Harry, and I am excited for more of normalDudley! :) Update soon please!

Great story so far, I eagerly await the next installment

i read the story and i was wondering if you are planning on updating the story anytime soon

Very good work and an enjoyable read.
Please carry on the great work.

Oh, this is SUCH a good story! I really, really, really hope you'll update soon! You've got me hooked!

Great story keep up the good writing. I hope to see more its a story that keeps you up unlike others that you can use to put you to sleep

Good take on the time travel idea. The introduction of Ellie is also a nice touch, she is very believable. Sirius not having a bit of a romantic past is unlikely considering his reputation Please keep working on this.

Definitely one of the best there is!
I like the way Harry always lets something slip. And his muttering about fate! Always makes me laugh! I can't wait for the H/G interactions, they are already promising to be fantastic. Also looking forward to first meeting with Nicolas. I wonder what Dudley will think about magic. I hope he's not going to freak, but instead he'll become interested, especially in the alternative forms. And poor, Draco, I always thought that this would be the case. Although, originally in canon, I think that he buried it very deep under the face of a Malfoy, kids do that. Usually in they hide it even better, because they are sad not to live up to the expectations of their parents, their role models in life from day one. Then it just became worse when he became older, he thought he was too far gone and that there was no other road then the one set by his father. This was really seen in DH. Hopefully, Harry will give a chance and Draco will actually open up. Their is great potential in Draco.

Although it's marked as Harry P. & Albus D., i hope there will be many fluff with H/G. What can I say, I'm a sucker for that, especially them. Lots and lots of scenes of strange new feelings, shy glances, awkward moments, POVs, angst for long lost loves, and then finally realizations and falling in love...

Ok, ill stop my rant now, sry for hogging your review channel...

Keep up the great work and hope to see an update soon!

Thanks

Europec

Simply Excellent. I look forward to updates.

i like and nice billd up and twists but you may whant to add some more background to the alltenetive magic. like harry doing a presantion to nicalis, panlla, the blacks and raemis.

Are you still updating?

You have a great story going on here. The only thing I have to say is try not to confuse words like to and too. They are very easy to overlook. But it throughs the meaning of the sentence off.

hello and thank you for writing this story i have enjoyed it thoroughly and hope you have time sometime soon to continue it while i don't have any constructive criticism to offer i have enjoyed it immensely :)

Please continue :)
Love the plot so far :D:D