Nice start. I really liked Kingdom of Heaven, and thought it was sorely over looked. I like your direction so far as well.

A great start! Historical accuracy is often sacrificed for entertainment value, don't worry about it. How come I get the impression that Balian doesn't like Richard at all? Not that I like Richard myself. It's just curious why he would have so much disdain for a man he's only just met.

Liked it :) Waiting for more!