I liked the bittersweet ending--it was rooted in reality. Betty is growing and maturing, and her decision reflects that. Good job with your story.

Aw, I liked this chapter. Though in reality, I don't know if Henry would be so forward (As you mentioned), I totally agree--in the AU fic world, it was so satisfying. You gave all of us what the writer's didn't.

I can totally see Walter giving Betty a mousepad for Valentine's Day. If that wasn't the straw that camel's back, then I don't know what is, lol.

I liked how you fleshed out Walter in this chapter. The show portrayed him so one-dimensionally, and you made him likeable enough for us to actually believe Betty would fall for him originally.

This was an absolutely brilliant ending, I loved it! Perfectly in character. Once again I loved the spot-on interaction between Daniel and Betty, and I think that Betty made the right choice with the Henry/Walter situation. These last couple of sentences were so simple yet so genius: "She hadn’t chosen Walter. She hadn’t even chosen Henry. She had chosen herself." Brilliant! I loved it! I hope to read more UB fics from you soon!

Impressive ending. I like that it is open-ended, with possibilities galore.

Favorite part:
“...Being with you makes me feel…”

“Happy,” Henry finished for her.

Awesome chapter. Loved the drama. I could totally picture Henry decking Walter, so kudos on the writing there.

Loved that it was Marc that called the scene to Betty's attention.

Aww, poor Henry.

Favorite lines:
"She had known it all along, but had been too afraid to acknowledge the truth, as it would have meant having to let go of a sure thing for only the promise of someone else and something more."

and

'“What’s with you? You’ve been so off lately. You’re bringing the whole pod-life down.”'

I liked this little bit of business: "If the phone had a cord, she probably would have been twisting it around her fingers."

I appreciate that Betty did the breaking up in this chapter. It was "way satisfying," to quote Justin.

I also liked the last little bit, with Ignacio comforting his daughter. You did a good job portraying Betty's home life.

You really make where Betty's at in her head clear. I like the introspective nature of this, particularly because it doesn't paint any of the characters involved in this triangle in an overly negative light, it's just all about what Betty's trying to sort through.

Very interesting beginning. I like how you pulled in the conversation from "Brothers." There's plenty of original and funny material here to balance it. I especially liked Betty's headdesk moment.

wonderful story! even though i am a devoted to b/h's ship, i definitely see Betty taking a break to find out who she is and henry being her friend in the process of that discovery. you did a wonderful job in capturing the characters and can easily see this played out on the show.

That was lovely. All parties concerned are satisfied (with the exception of Walter) and the punch line wasn't too sentimental and not too dismissive in tone.

You struck the correct balance in this story, and I hope to see more from you.

I'm not a Betty/Henry fan but...loved it! Especially the little touches (the chocolate-covered peanuts and milk with Hilda, Daniel calling security). Love that Betty got to give Walter a piece of her mind (wish she had done it on the show, at some point). Please keep going!

I don't think it lacks originality, it just seems like you're only changeing part of it. I don't know if that made any sence but I don't know how else to say it.