Good job! Dang! the sex scence is so good! Could u make another one with more graphic? Thats good! Dang u r a good writer! good job! Wonderful!

Love this! Finally there are a few more Ian fics out there. and Ian/Yassen is somehow so right.

I enormously enjoyed reading this last updated chapter...

-The smile that graces his lips makes his face even more handsome. And younger still.-

Heh, it's nice to picture, sort of, Ian thinking this...

his jealousy when John shows his concern about the Russian...

and the fact that...

well, the afore-mentioned -younger still- isn't really beared in mind, is it ;P

Anyway, I look forward to the next chapter

Tah, Lhune

PS: I got no mail of this... how dare they not to!

I'm sure I reviewed this before...Oh well, I'm not on the reviews page so I guess not (did u delete my review?...evil...nah, just joking).

Anyway, yeah, back to the point. Loved it, great fic. Thought it was sweet. I feel really sorry for Yassen. I love that Russian.

What would have been really cool is if you used Cyrillic lettering as well as including the Russian word for yes, but most people wouldn't have been able to read that. Not that most people would know that 'da' is the Russian word for yes anyway. I can't remember any of the shortcut keys for cyrillic but you should be able to find it in the insert symbol window (I'm assuming you have microsoft here, don't know what you do on other software.)

Anyway, that was so sweet. There are probably a few grammar and continuity issues but I'm not bothered about them. Overall really great. :)

'It were only a couple of seconds after she asked that he answered.'

If you want to stick with your present-tense style of witing, this should be 'It is', not 'It were'. And anyway 'it were' is VERY bad grammar. Also, I think you should have added in a note or something that 'Da' is 'yes' in russian. Most pople probably won't know that.

But overall, it's a good story.

Keep writing!

-Fox

great

iih (you know one should multiplate the number of 'i' in this... this happy squeal :D)

I feel soo honoured, I really do. Nobody ofered me an official birthday fanfic before, one of yassen none the less!

I shall treasure it.

(hm maybe I can print this one, put it in a binding and place it next to the 2 SW fics I got of you... between the best of books I own ;3)

You know what I think about this one,

and to the others who might read this,

I absolutely loved it...

I still do.

You did a marvelous job so far.

(I'm convinced the continuation will be marvelous too... once you are in the 'proper' mood)

One thing is sure,

You are cruel to do such a thing to our beloved Russian assassin. I'd never do something like that (smiles wickedly)

I'm sure I only found out about it today, the day after my birthday but yesterday was quite... quite busy and that would be putting it mildly.

'til the next call (which should be this evening) and hope you feel better (if only a little)

and...

Thank You again!

Lhune

] i love this!

[added to my favorite stories D]

A very good story...will there be any more?

The present tense form is good. There are a few grammar mistakes though.

In the first line, you have the phrase "It are voices". "It" is singular, "are voices" are plural. You could change it to "It is a voice" to fit in with the previous sentence.

You used "Yet he was" twice within two short paragraphs (after the story break. A reader notices and it makes the flow of the story a little jerky. Another thing. You could connect the phrase to the previous sentence. Try it and see if it sounds better.

The beginning of the first sentence before 'Yet he was' is a little murky. "A night were actually, you..." doesn't really make sense.

"The cold steal of his knife" - steel rather than steal.

If Yassen was in a coma for a month, he couldn't have possibly been present at the end of Stormbreaker to talk to Alex.

Those are all I can find. The ending is exceptionally good. The choice of characters are interesting. This is a unique story. Keep it up!