You nailed the Cohen family dynamic and by doing so, conjured a darn sweet story.

M.

Okay, a bit of the first segment made me slightly queasy. And I'm not sure I can believe Seth using the phrase "sussed out." Nevertheless, I am in love with this story. I think it's a wonderful idea of how things could have worked out, and the characters are generally spot-on. ("un-uterusy" - hee! I love that whole section with Summer) You have an interesting writing style, the way you break up sentences with descriptive actions, and I like that you were able to shift viewpoints a few times without it becoming confusing.

I love Seth coming home drunk, Ryan shouldering responsibility and putting him to bed, and the scene with Kirsten and Seth in the kitchen is my favorite one of all; I can just see him going from grouchy and sarcastic to suddenly frightened. Although...it might be tied with the one further on, with Kirsten and both boys. I loved her reaching out for their hands, very telling. And Tobi-wan-kenobi! Hilarious.

aw I loved the bittersweet nature of this

beautiful

Beautiful, You kept everyone in character, which is usually the hardest part about writing Fanfiction. I loved every second of your story, it left me feeling all warm inside.

so sweet! And very funny!

Really, really enjoyed this. I think you're right though, if Kirstin had a girl it would ruin the dynamics of the Cohen family. Alot of people are keen that the baby is a girl but Kirstin is the women in their house and I'm not sure that there is room for another. I don't know why but I just cant see her with a girl, a roomful of boys but not a girl, funny. Some people just don't suit particular sex of children, I had boys and kinda of wanted a girl but now I teach them ( girls that is)I realise that nature knows best, couldn't stand it. I love being the women in my house, the most important person,the centre of my boys world, definately a Kirstin trait. Goodness, I'm not going to be a great mother in law, am I?

That was a really nice fan fic! Are you going to update or was it a one off? Please update