pretty good but not enough naru/tayu

pretty good... i really like the dark fic... though... will you drop the crossbow thing? it really ruined naruto's image... for crying out loud why would you need a cross bow if you can teleport and slam a rasengan to your enemy right? still the sword comeback is pretty good, just hope you'd make some jutsu's for it... all in all, great fic, will wait for the next story!

The reason I don't read past the third chapter is because what kind of ninja uses a crossbow? That kinda ruins it for me <_<.

It has been years now and you still haven't put up a sequel yet. I don't think that's very soon as you said it was going to be. You've been working on that crappy Father's Wrath story too much (Which isn't near as good as this one). If you're also working on the sequel, then when will you be putting up a few chapters of it. I know you're busy with your current story, but if you had been working on it at least a little, then at least you'd be able to post just one little chapter of it? Anyway, this is one of the best Dark Naruto stories I've read, so I hope someday you'll keep your word and write a sequel.

First naruto story I've read that was dark and I though it was good. I'll be looking at that sequel.

this is honestly the best story i've ever read i like dark naruto hes just so much more cooler so when will you put the sequel up?

awesome hahahahahahaha is the best fanfic i ever read congratulations man

the cross bow thing is retarded but since the story is already done i guess it doesn't matter. you need to add more decriptive value to you stoyry most people find when writting describing things is hard and boring. I also suggest you look up a good thesares the word was is way over used in the englishuage as is moved and said. not that they are in your story. It is extremely hard for me to do narrative stories and for that i give you a thumbs up you should try first person sometime. though granted narrative is far more interesting because you can portray more than one persons feeling through out the story. ANYWAY my rambling must be boring you and also just to let you know this is the logest review i've ever made. SO be happy i waisted five minutes of my time typing this ok not five minutes but like two. THANKS for the story i hope to be posting someone my own before long. and when i do i hope you will read them and ill be leaving more reviews so i hope you dont geet to upset over my critique because im only trying to help YOU. ~*Katie*~

gay weapon, and wtf, he can't even get kanashibari no jutsu right? plus, it's really just killing intent mixed with chakra, no handsigns.and also, he's been trained by orochimaru for 4 years, why can't he even face down tayuya? he needed to be freakin RESCUED of all dammed things!

I know it was for the plot, but hate isn't the opposite of love. Apathy is.

This story was really good in my opinion. I liked the way the storyline went and how you showed all the viewpoints. That was the really great part of it. Also, showing each character and how they now acted while showing old traits was really good too. I cant wait till the sequal.

Well this is a good story, and think Leaf would have a cow knowing that the Fourth would have wanted his son to destroy them for not treating him like the Hero he was.

But anyways good story ^^

Great story. the charcter and plot developement were well done and detailed.

But when will you write the sequel.

you bastard what a way to end it

good story.