I totally love reading the real dialog with Axel's thoughts mixed in. And this one was amazing.

It's sad, it's sweet, it's wonderful. I absolutely loved it.

I like how the flashbacks are interspersed, especially since they appear at the perfect moments. Fantastic job.

I've always thought that that scene where Axel first enters, in lieu of his body language, the way he approaches Roxas, and the words that he uses, holds a strong backstory.
I never thought I'd get to read a fanfic about it, and I'd like to say that this was lovely, very much so. I think you captured Axel's state of mind perfectly. It was well written, the reader is drawn in and feels Axel's pain, which helps to make it the great read that it is.

wow, I usually hate reading angst type stories but you write really well.

this is really good!
i dont know why it hasnt got more reviews than it has
and even though i know what happens next i want there to be a next chapter
... if that makes any sense!
:) anyway i loved reading it
keep the stories coming.

Wow. I really liked this. The flashbacks interspersed with the fight scenes - which were really well written, by the way - managed to flow very nicely.

I also like how you manage to keep true to the concept that Nobodies aren't supposed to feel, but Roxas and Axel came close enough for it to torment Axel because he remembers and Roxas doesn't.

And the ending - well, it's sad, but then again, so is their story. Great job on a wonderful fic. ^^