 Dark Shining Light 2007-02-17 . chapter 1It was so CUTE!
( Not trying to pick a fight; you don't know how many people think that) But with the quotes Yugi is saying, it sounds like he's talking to himself since Jounouchi and Anzu are using the same quotes. Plus the fact that you switch fist POV and back to third maybe you should italize(can't spell) when he's talking about himself. Or do you already know this?
Anyway, its a cute story, even for a preview and I have a feeling I'm going to be stuck to this story for a LONG time! |