This was a well-written piece for Freya's return to Burmecia. I like who you introduced Fratley, interrupting her memory of him. Nice work.
Why won't you give me a straight answer about Cleyra? Is it a reference to one of your previous stories or not? Or did you just steal my idea from "The Sentinel"?
Also, where is my cookie? I want it now!

Uh...just how was Cleyra restored? I take it that it is revived after an event in one of your earlier works that I haven't read. You ought to explain things that rely on your previous works, since I bet very few people will have read them and people tend to get put off with sequel-like pieces.
Lovely scenes between Freya and Fratley there, very kinky...;)
I also like the jokes from the merchant with Fratley's hair.
I noticed a few typos and grammar errors in there. You might want to check over this.
Good stuff though. Why not continue with an event that takes place after this one? Do I get my cookie now?
Keep up the good work!

Nice work there Mel! That had some very interesting words between Freya and Amarant. I would have thought Amarant would be less sensitive towards Freya and more snidy and tactless. Oh well.
Another minor point, Quina was head chef in Alexandria at the very start of the game, so she isn't exactly "new". You can see her when you're searching for Garnet as Steiner. It's no big deal though.
Good work though, I'll move on to chapter 2...
BTW, who's Figgy?