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Reviews for: Family Jewels
Darkswansong
2008-02-05 . chapter 1
Fantastic!

From the moment Lupin makes his appearance I said to myself, "m, pity he wasn't disguised as the statue. That would have been hilarious." So obviously I was pleased with the ending. Very clever. Very in the spirit of Lupin I. And I
Maxwell's Daemon
2007-04-14 . chapter 1
This is exceedingly silly, but an excellent display of your skills nonetheless. Even so, there's one thing I didn't get:

"Nazumi stood behind the inspector, wearing a satisfied smile."

So, this guy's girlfriend has been so satisfied that she's still sitting in a small puddle, but he's the one smiling? They must have a very open and forgiving relationship.

Excellent dialogue, nice pacing and just a funny story. Well done.
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