Whew! Talk about snapping. Yeah, it's scary what people can do when thrown too far over the edge.

Wow. That was just... wow. Great job

:O That is me with my mouth agape! Fantastic story! Poor Momiji! I can't believe the lengths that Hatori went to! I am impressed. Good for him.
Have you seen the Fruits Basket videos? There is one where they go to the hot springs and Momiji makes up a song about himself... every time I read his name now I have to sing it in my head.
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Oh, interesting dark fic. Hatori certainly has his reasons, but I don't actually see him doing that. I just died when you beat Momiji up, he's my favorite character! Those two point aside, it's a great angsty piece and all of the character portrayals were right on target. At least I am nullified while I wait for the next volume...for now. (evil laughter)

yes yes my dears, always be wary of the calm, responsible ones... Those are the potential murderers. Hehe. Jokes aside, this was good. It seems perfectly coherent. Good job.
Isa

YAY FOR POISONIOUS MURDERS!

Xanatos: For the love of God!

Me: Wah?

Xanatos: Can’t you leave me alone for one freaking day?

Me: …No.

Xanatos: And YOU, can’t you write a story where someone doesn’t get maimed, raped, or killed?

Me: But that’s so boring, this is better. And Hatori killed Akito!

Xanatos: Which means nothing to me, I don’t you’re retarded mangas. I have better things to do.

Me: Wouldn’t it be ironic if they needed Akito to break the curse?

Xanatos: What the hell are you talking about?

Obi-Wan: That would stink! Poor, stupid little Tohru would probably cry. I feel so bad for her, she’s so sweet and her life sucked.

Xanatos: …

Obi-Wan: What?

Xanatos: Fag.

Obi-Wan: …Yeah, but so are you.

Xanatos: But I don’t read this crap. Fruits Basket, Obi-Wan. FRUIT. That should have been a dead giveaway.

Me: Ahem. I had a point I wanted to make.

Xanatos: You always think you have a point and you never do.

Me: But this is an apPOINTment.

Xanatos: …

Me: See what I did there?

Xanatos: I saw.

Obi-Wan: An appointment? With who?

Me: Well, Chelsea and I were talking, and… well… Caydyn this is for your own good.

Caydyn: Huh?

Morgan: (looks at paper) I have a noon appointment with a Juli.

Me: That’s me! (grabs Caydyn) See, this boy is really, really, REALLY gay, and we kind of need your help.

Morgan: …Give me twenty minutes. (Grabs Caydyn’s arm) You’d better come too. (Grabs Obi-Wan’s arm)

Obi-Wan: Hey wait a second! What are you going to do!

Morgan: The only way to fix this is to beat the gayness out of both of you. (leaves with crying gay boys)

Xanatos: You know that won’t help, I’ll just corrupt him again.

Me: I know, but maybe every time Caydyn looks at a man inappropriately from now on he’ll feel the pain of Morgan and a stick.

Xanatos: Or maybe he’ll at least be less gay.

Me: …You know, since we’re alone…

Xanatos: No.

Me: Oh come on! Whatever happened to the Xanatos that just likes sex?

Xanatos: Haven’t you paid any attention? Teenage boys and girls that I can torment into lesbians. See, with you and Chelsea it just doesn’t work because after I slept with one of you and then the other the first one would be all, “is it my turn again?” and you wouldn’t care.

Me: But you could totally talk one of us into having a threesome with you and Obi-Wan. …Or both of us.

Xanatos: But after having a taste of a sex god like myself you’d want it all the time and I just have better things to do.

Me: What if we made a schedule?

Xanatos: Tempting, but no.

Morgan: (returns) My work here is done.

Me: You know, while you’re here…

Xanatos: Tramp.

Me: You had your chance.

Obi-Wan: (Returns) Hey guys.

Me: Why aren’t you bleeding?

Obi-Wan: I was able to convince him I’m not gay, just a nice guy. Caydyn didn’t get off so easy.

Caydyn: (twitching) so many… metal rods…

Xanatos: Hey Caydyn.

Caydyn: You’re talking to me? Does that mean you want me now? YES I AM VICTORIOUS!

Xanatos: Told you.

Me: Well that was a waste of my money. (looks at Morgan) You know I should get more out of this.

Xanatos: Okay, you really need to leave. There’s only room for one stud here, and that’s me.

Me: Yes, cage-fight for my attention!

Xanatos: On second thought, I don’t care that much.

Me: Asshole.

Xanatos: What was that?

Me: You heard me.

Xanatos: ...

Obi-Wan: Where did Juli go?

Xanatos: Nowhere. Hey Chels, if Juli was say tied up in a dark room hanging over a tank of ten hungry crocodiles from her feet and a rat was slowly chewing the rope to nothing what would you do to get her back?

Obi-Wan: Xanatos!

Xanatos: What? Is a hypothetical situation, I'm just curious.

OMG that was ao amazingly spiffarific i really luffed it alot. my favorite part was the poisoning

*Mean Titan*

I loved it! THIS SO GOES ON MY FAVORITES!