T.T I think I'll have to cry myself to sleep tonight...you gotta right more...make it happy please this is tormet to my soul...but GREAT story..wonderful..amazing...sad T.T *trying to cry myself to sleep*

WAH! So SAD! Good job! :) :( ... ?

wow that was great

Oh, screw getting to class on time. I'm so reading this RIGHT NOW.

"Stuck in a porcelain world of politics where children too were tools." Ahh, such beauty in the prose.
"Didn’t you realize at all that I smiled less because I knew I was becoming addicted to your presence?" Oh. OH. That whole paragraph just sent this tremendous jolt through me.

I really like the correlation between chapters. I like how some lines carry through and both guys say them. Oh man, reading this hurts. And Yzak purposely avoiding the college Dearka went to seems like something he would do to try to stop his own suffering. Looks like it didn't work though, and Yzak still fell hard.

"This was about the time when I realized I loved you…so this time, I enlisted. If school was not enough to part me from you, the army should have been." Oh. My. God. That's it, I'm going to cry, because I know what Yzak feels like. He loves Dearka so much, but he feels like he hates himself for daring to do so. He feels hopeless, like he's made such a mistake and he just needs to get away from it no matter how much it might hurt him... And the army makes so much sense. Of course training and killing would make Yzak focus on something else. Like his LIFE instead of his love.

I have the biggest lump ever in my throat right now. I think the mood you create definitely has something to do with the tone and words you've chosen. It's just like real conversation and dialogue so that I can almost hear Yzak talking out loud. And there's so much tension in it. (sob sob) AH! All right, I love that paragraph about Dearka as Yzak's curse. WOW. Intense.

And I just died from the last line. Kiddo, this piece of work really hits me hard, and I don't know why. It's... magic! I want to blow your phrases up poster size and paste them to my wall, because THAT is how much I love this story. It's one of my all time favorites. Nicely fuckin' done.

Poor Dearka, no Yzak T__T Short and sweet, but well done. Thank you for sharing.

nice one!everything is perfectly protrayed:)

I totally agree with SlvrSoleAlchmst1. This is by far the most powerful and moving fanfic I've ever read. It contains so much emotion, and I got swept away by the force of your writing(^^) A extremely poignant story...and one of your best so far.

*dies* Th-this is so powerful. From the very first lines to that explosive last line, you had me holding my breath with my heart aching desperately and my hands trembling with sorrow and rage and defeat. AUGH - pieces like this just take me to a realm where I feel like I AM the character, and I definitely felt Dearka's pain. Gah, I'm so excited right now I can hardly leave a decent review. I can't wait for Yzak's side. *is breathless and shaking* I can't explain just how this fic makes me feel, either, but Jesus do I love it.

A few of my favorite parts:
"Do you remember when I told you that if only you were a girl, I’d make you my girlfriend?"
"It worked sometimes, but not often enough. I hated seeing you like that."
"I hadn’t seen you in three years…and the first thing I thought when I met you was, damn, you were pretty." (That part really made me smile.)
"It hurt watching you become so competitive, so eager to learn how to kill, how to destroy."
"I knew that our friendship was getting stronger…to the point of addiction." (KYYA!)
"I just…I don’t know. I’m fucked up right now, okay? And for that, yes, I blame you."
"I hate you. I hate you to hell for that."
And the whole last big paragraph and that last fuckin' line... murdered me. Ah my god.

I'm sorry all I can seem to do right now is quote your amazing work back at you. This just... killed me. It's going on my favorites list, god damn it. This has so much emotion in it. I could cry for Dearka. Thanks for posting this! Good luck on your exams, by the way. ;P

i usually don't read YD fics just because i am so obsessed with the ShihoYzak pairing, but this one caught my attention, and no wonder, it was wonderfully written. the emotion,love, and anger was really evident in Dearka.
nice job!