 OSnapItzNikki 9/5/11 . chapter 14I can't believe this is your first story. I have so many things to say!
Plot: I thought it was original and interesting. No cliche part where they get together in the first few chapters, and nothing I've ever read before. It was not all happy endings, which I think is new and wonderful. After all, a book like that wouldn't be exciting. I do think, though that in my opinion, a sequel can also take place, but that's all you.
Structure and grammar: I noticed a few mistakes in spelling and grammar, but only about 3. So not too bad, considering you're a new writer at this. I do suggest a beta-reader if you don't have one. I myself rely on beta-readers and editors, and am one myself. The structure was very put together well. It moved nicely and didn't have any awkward stops, or fast moving blurs.
Vocabulary: You were perfect at this. There were nice new words that I didn't even know! And it just enchanced the book even more.
All in all, the book was great, and it actually has publishing material, unlike some fanfictions. If you want to publish, Webook is a great website where you can post stories, get reviews, and submit to publishers. Good luck if you wish to. So I thoroughly enjoyed this story, and I'll be on the lookout for many more. _
-Nicole |
 Chocobear24 3/25/11 . chapter 14That story was absolutely amazing!I laughed,I cried,and I became enraged! :(The deaths of two of my favorite vampire knight characters)Your use of vocabulary was stunning and described the story very vividly for me also I thought that Aidou was also very noble and kind to sacrifice his life for the one he cared for the most 3(Your death will not go down without meaning!D)Thank you for such a heartbreaking but wonderful story.
P.S. I originally only started reading this story because it had the main characters as Aidou H.and Kain A.; and now look where I am!Sated and depressed at the same time...I never even imagined it would end up like this.Oh,and I'm sorry about my insanely long review!Shoot!I just made it longer!Oh,wait...never mind I think I'll just stop talking... |
 hellhound14 3/13/11 . chapter 13i love your sotry it is great i wish there could be a sequel :D |
 CMinuteByMinute 1/11/11 . chapter 14Freakishly good. |
 xSayori 8/2/10 . chapter 14Oh mah god that was awesome!
I would review every chapter, but the need to click the 'next' button was stronger x] |
 Psycho17 5/7/10 . chapter 1I luv your FanFiction... It's great and i was on DevienArt, that's how i learned of the story. Keep on writing ;) |
 Hand Over the Bishies 3/22/10 . chapter 14can I just say that this is my favourite fanfic EVER? no, I'm not just saying that, I mean it! It was so wonderfully written and in-character and everything a fanfic could ever hope to be!
thank you so much for writing this. I told all my friends about it and am about to send them a link to read it. |
 rach 12/4/09 . chapter 13 NOO poor aido! *crys* |
 SmartGirl16 5/30/09 . chapter 14It was an AMAZING story.it was sad at the end.AWSOME story. |
 rohini 5/15/09 . chapter 14 i loved this fan fic. the writing was awesome, the storyline was awesome and the emotions and theme rocked! poor aidou! but at least akatsuki got sum1. sry for not reviewing b4, i was in a hurry, and also anxious to read more. |
 kitkatyobaril-chan 12/9/08 . chapter 14OMG...
This is the most happyist, sadist and funnyist story that i have ever read!
I loved the begging and the endding everything! |
 Chaos Dragon-Fox 10/25/08 . chapter 14Your story was amazing! such depth! i'm sad for Aido, but the ending was good, real closure. |
 Purple-Jasmine 9/18/08 . chapter 14Nicely done. Bit confusing at times, especially the part with Ichiru but otherwise good job.
Rose |
 UnwrittenHistory 8/4/08 . chapter 13AHAHA, cute story! I love it! xP Please continue? And you didn't have to kill...-_-', still. Love your story! |
 Blackxthorn 6/25/08 . chapter 14Okay, so I just finished reading it all, and it was overall quite enjoyable. Although I almost smashed the computer when Kaname and Aido died. I was sitting there waiting for them to come back to life or something. [ Oh well. It turned out great, I loved it. |