I <3ed this. It had excellent characterisation. I've skimmed through some of your other fics, apparently you're quite good at it. One critisism is that at the end it seemed... incomplete and abrupt as an ending, but I guess it's because there was another six hundred words worth of Vanelo goodness...

Take care.

ARGH!! Complete? I am distraght. "Captured and carted off to Nalbina"? Does that happen in the game or is that yours? Cause if so, I for one want to know what happens! Congrats, your writing is very good at catching a reader's attention and interest. ^_^

This is one of the most beautiful and gut-wrenching pieces involving Vaan, Penelo and Reks that I've read so far. I adore how well you delved into Vaan's serious side since most people-- myself not exluded!-- usually treat him as comic relief. But he does have an extremely sad background and I love how beautifully you delve into it.

(P.S. Hope you don't mind that I pimped this fic out to the Vaanxpenelo comm at Livejournal! It deserved some love.

I think the ending's just fine; it ties off the story well. I would like to see some of those removed parts, through.

This is really good! I enjoyed it a lot. Please continue!!

Very clever and unique. Nobody ever writes a good Vaan, and as a oneshot, its pretty damn good!

lol, I'd like to see that additional 600 or so words. This is already pretty good. And if you end it with a line like you've ended it here, I think it would be pretty darn cool.

:D

I'm amazed at just how well you percieve Vaan based off of the little character complexity they give you in the game. I love your writing, you're very talented. Every time I read your stuff it's very inspiring.

This possible one-shot/story was very crisp and refreshing. No typos and grammar errors. It was easy to read yet complex at the same time, and I like that!

Please continue on! I love your work!