I did highly enjoy reading this actually. It's quite good.

I really liked this story. For one, there was a lot of emphasis on the structuring of the Hunters themselves, which I found to be particularly interesting. Outside of the games, I never really put a lot of thought into what a hunter's daily life would be like before this, so I found this to be fairly illuminating look into some of the different aspects of our favorite Reploids lives. The deliberate pacing of the story was well thought out too, as was the descriptions of the scenes that the story took place in. The society of reploids and humans that was shown was also fun, showing places that were both backwards and forwards in their attitude towards Reploids and the society that they have managed to create for themselves.

There were a few errors here and there within the story, including the addition of unnecessary words, as well as the omition of certain words as well that occasionally interrupted the narritive of the story, but overall I was able to often piece together exactly what you intended to say in most situations when they occured.

I do hope you will begin writing the story 'Maverick Hunter X: The Untold Chapters' when you state that you will, but if not, I look forward to whatever work you will do in regards to Megaman X's world in the future. Thanks!

Absolutely splendid.

I give the most high of marks for creativity and the usage of imagination. I really like creative, well-thought and planned fanfiction that isn't the same story over and over again. I'm glad that your stories are neither redundant or just pushed out in a day with little thought.

You have very lucid writing, easy to understand jargon, the perfect amount of dialog (something a lot of armature authors usually skimp out on, or give too much) and very good transitions within your plot. Over all, your writing style is very attractive and appealing to the eye.

Your story itself is also very attractive, I would put it in a hall of fame for Rockman fiction. I can honestly say it's one of the best that I have read in a good long while.

There are however, a few spelling errors and grammatical errors that can be fixed easily with some revision. Also, I'm not entirely certain if X is exactly canon or not, but that's not all that important. I'm just glad you didn't make X a girly-bot >.>!

I hope you do continue with your stories, and I hope you enjoy writing them as much as I enjoy reading them.

Good luck.

I didn't get everything I wanted to say in my first review.

I like the writing style you use in this story as well as your others. It's refreshingly different from most other stories and is well done.

The picture you paint of the MMX world is quite interesting too and in most cases not how I've seen others approach it and it does add greatly to the story.

I hope to see more of your work in the future.

I apologize for not being consistent in posting reviews, it's a bad habit I have gotten into.

So, things have all been wrapped then?

Well I have to say that we've had a few surpises here. General Go's ability to network to other processors in his body is an odd ability and one that played to the strengths of SE tech.

As General Go never really got his rebellion into motion, it would be rather easy to cover it up. Though I have a good idea where those other weapons may be given the sudden appearance of the ghost council.

However I question their timing in revealing themselves. It doesn't
particularly accomplish anything. I mean unless they bother to show up and tell X when they are up to something, how is he supposed to stay out of their affairs? They really stood a better chance of only having him blindly stumble into their affairs by leaving him alone. Now they have given up the element of suprise to an extent. X knows now to keep a discrete eye out for anything that might have to do with them. Plus given his job, he's unlikely to not interfere if sent in there as his mission. Not unless they apply pressure to higher ranking Hunters to not sent X - which might have been a wiser use of their intimidation tactics.

I mean, really just the manner they chose to inform X in will launch an
investigation by itself. Teleporting accidents are probably really rare, let alone one that results in limb that was ripped off, plus I'd wager there was a delay in his arrival, another uncommon phenomena for teleportors even if one experienced an accident.

Overall, very ameturish and thuggish. If they had wanted it to look like a teleporter accident, they could've done so in a manner that would've killed X and therefore prevent him from being a thorn in their side and if they really are well-connected, move someone more controllable into his place. They don't come across as the brightest and if this little venture of theirs was authorized by the ghost council, one wonders why such stupidity was used in the execution of it.

I mean they even used a name and the idiots are probably so confident that they didn't even use a code name! The ghost council better have some more competent folks hanging around or they're SOL for their plans.

Honestly, they made the mistakes of 1) letting someone know of the ghost council's existence who had previously been unaware, 2) They gave him a name that he can try looking up, 3) the way they chose to introduce themselves will probably prompt an investigation that might bring unwanted attention they might otherwise have avoided.

If X had been in the dark, he might have even been a more controllable element for this ghost council.

The only reasons I can think of that someone would take this needless risk or risk divulging the info they did would be to have X chasing after a non existant group and looking for a link to a non-existant conspiracy or to get X to start going after the Ghost Council as the ones who kidnapped him were part of a rival group rather than affiliated with the Ghost Council - just because they kidnapped X doesn't mean they have to tell the truth of who they work for or why they did it.

That would make things more interesting. X would literally be chasing phantoms or at least the wrong group while these guys pursued their actual agendas . . . but still to waste the time and effort of doing this in that case, they must want X to tell others so that there is a scapegoat for the actions Tall Shear and crew will be taking. That means that whatever plans they have may either directly involve X or need something to keep him off balance as the plan is likely to have him meddling at some point.

That indicates either another rebellion or some other military action or soemthing targeting or involving the Hunters in some manner. Something that X can't possibly avoid being involved in.

Despite working together like old times, there's still some tension there between X and Alia. It's probably still some of the lingering hurt from their past relationship and maybe Alia feels a bit ashamed of some of the things she's done since then (like working SE tech and what was done to Gate).

X may not like the head scientist of the Hunters (he does seem a bit unscrupulous - though even he may not have known of General Go's ability till after examining the body) but people like that keep the Hunters a step ahead of the Mavericks . . . though I wonder if some of X's feelings on that matter have to do more with his feeling tricked than anything else.

Good job.

Truthfully, I look forward to seeing both stories you mentioned, but I do hope you get enough reviews to do the Maverick Hunter X story.

This story could easily have been rated-T with a simple edit. You may be alienating some of the readers who would assume M-rated stories are nothing but mindless s3x and g0re. This was an overall well written story that puts other MMX fanfics to shame, although it loses some believability in the fact that Cain is still alive. It takes place after MMX 8 right?


PS: I love your usage of metaphors.

Kick **. That's pretty much it.

Woah...awesome...

Interesting...

The part where the femme fatale lets X "learn the curves of her SEXY BO-DAY" made me ROLL MY EYES. In other words, it's just plain bad. Actually, the entire sequence made me roll my eyes, and X's reactions seemed stale. That's my only true criticism here. Other than that, I'd prefer more expanded character descriptions.

Wow, I wasn't expecting that. I guess someone figured out who she was and what she was up to.

Still, that would mean they would've known where she would be in advance. Of course the intended target could've even been X or someone trying to send him a message.

And the plot thickens. Suspects have been eliminated from the list and while several possible paths to disaster present themselves, there is no way to be certain which one the mastermind behind the plot will take or if they will only limit themselves to one of those options.

I wonder what the next move will be.

Long time no see. I recall you posting this story on another site and had wondered what had happened when you stopped updating.

It's good to see the story back up and I'm looking forward to seeing what happens.

The orna-man concept is an intersting one and a nice play on words given how close it is to the word ornament, which really describes what they are.

yayz!

interesting...