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| Disenchanting Smiles 2008-08-03 ch 1,  | abuseYour writing is good. The emotions were very good. The format and punctuation could use a lot of work though. I would suggest a beta to help you. |
| MoonyIsTheMan 2007-12-29 ch 1, | abuseThat was really sweet. Oh, I just want to point out that every time someone else speaks, a new paragraph is born. |
| Dark Angel's Blue Fire 2007-10-29 ch 1, | abuseaww Poor Remus! good one-shot though |
| Anna Strife0211 2007-08-02 ch 1, | abuseI loved ur fic...really cool, cuz im no big fan of Remus/Tonks, even though i liked her and stuff (but goin to cool gal to depressed one..killed my fanatism) Anyways..i was wonderin if i could do some changes to ur fic..cuz i wanted to do one, and ur fic its a good waY to begin with...but only if u want to Thanks again and take care AnnaStrife |
| Aearlor 2007-07-02 ch 1, | abuseVery good. I loved it, going straight to favourites. :) PS. When someone starts to talk it's easier to read if you put it on a seperate line. |
| MC 2007-06-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseOh my god, I love you! I hate NT/RL I love SBRL! OMG! I love you!! Thank you so much..we SBRL fans love you! |
| RL4SBnotNT 2007-05-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is a good story! Not being mean to Tnks but I love fics where Remus tells her he lovesS Siri not her! Yay! RL4SBnotNT x |
| Geek Squared 1307 2007-02-24 ch 1, | abuseThis is so awesome! I love Sirius/Remus and am not a big fan of Remus/Tonks, although I do love Tonks' character. It's so sad! Tonks seemed to be a bit insensitive in this story, and I don't really think her character's like that, but I loved the story anyway. Great job! G.S.1307 |
| Bottlebrush 2007-02-23 ch 1, | abuseI do like this, just the mere fact that it doesn't end with Remus falling into Tonks's arms is enough to make me like it. I like the grandmother's portrait, that would be Andromeda's mother, Sirius's aunt? It's a nice idea, bringing her in. It could be said Remus was being unkind not to tell Tonks the truth sooner, he's been wasting her time and letting her think she had a chance, but I suppose he was hoping she would get the message without him having to spell it out. He is a person who will avoid confrontations whenever possible, but sometimes it's better just to be honest. One thing - where you have your characters in conversation, it would probably be better to have a separate line when each person speaks. Then it's easier to tell who is saying what. |
| dracolover18 2007-02-23 ch 1, | abuseit was really good and a sequel would be cool but you don't have to is remus going to try to bring sirius back? i loved it you rock!! |
| Remus-x-Sirius-Is-My-OTP 2007-02-23 ch 1, | abuseYou made me cry, you evil person! :.( |
| Queen Zeppelin 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseDon't write a sequel with suicide...hat seems what this is leading up to...if you are going to do a sequel, please make Sirius come back to life! |
| rekahneko 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI like how you talked about the meaning behind the two of them holding hands at the funeral. It does seem like they would be comforting each other rather than having some sort of romantic liason at a funeral of all places... Good story, even if it is sad! (-: |
| lafayette722 2007-02-22 ch 1, | abuseI don't really like Remus/Sirius but this was very well written. |