i really really like this. though it has the overall sad tone to it, it is happy in some parts. i think you did really well, since not very much is known about Marlene. very well done.

inupupby5

What a refreshing change of characters! The series never gave us much of a window into who Marlene really was as a person. You captured her personality in a way I imagined she would be like. From the English stories you have written, you have a wonderful grasp on the rhythm of story-telling. There are the occasional wording mistakes, but I chalk that up to a small language barrier. (I work for a French-owned aerospace company and in the correspondence with my colleagues in France, there are discrepancies with some of the wording choices. So, to me your grammatical mistakes were minor as I am accustomed to seeing them.)

hello. very good, the song is good in it (bref, ça rend bien, quoi), and, euh, we feel if we were in Marlene's place... (euh, tu vois ce que je veux dire?) bref, on a l'impression d'être à sa place, de ressentir les mêmes choses qu'elle, et finalement, c'est un peu ça le but. très bien.
dis, j'ai posté le chapitre 17... (désolée, c'est plus fort que moi...)

I've never seen a story about Marlene. You make her sound like such a great woman. The only problems I see are the occasional typos and the lyrics, since they're very distracting. But the story itself is great!

loved it! and were very impressed by your command of the English language! there's a few grammar errors here and there, but this is leaps and bounds above the work of some native speakers.

the way u had M. musing on how she was different things to different ppl and wondering about the kind of legacy she'd leave seemed very realistic. we also enjoyed how you had her thoughts on A's "Playboy" rep. as most fics don't touch on that subject.

great job!

wow great recostruct of marlenes chara and great song anyway ;-)