Why the fu-ck did you name him Bob? Were you being lazy? Other than that, funny a-ss story. I liked the part where the kid goes screaming to Impa that he has a secret that he can’t tell.

y bob y not issac or rivien or some compecated name like that

HAHAHAHAHA! TOTALLY WORTH MY TIME! 1 FO SHO! I can't believe that bob saw them "getting funky"! good thing he was like 4!

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no other comment...

It was actually pretty good...very good in fact...-drools- but seriously, I think you should have just started with the Link/Zelda lemon, and not mentioned their son being in the room watching till the last second, just for shock factor. Good story though. Maybe I'll read the two sequels.

oh Link is so busted!XDXDXDXDXDXDXDXD

probably a 9 or 8. God i nearly puked and I just ate lunch too! LOL!

OMG that was so funny! I can't believe they didn't see him. Oh well lol write again totally funny

You're an idiot.

I give it a 10. *barf*

Ahahahahahahahaha! I hope like hell that never happens to me!

That was totally hillariuos and i rate a 1 cause it was wrong for the kid to be there for so long but it wasnt sick it was funny write more

XD I found this hilarious. Like, it really just made me want to laugh. So thank you, cause I was having a crappy day after track practice.

Now for my evil part of the comment. The critique. You story had it's wonderfully funny line to follow, but it was a bit choppy, not hard to read, but it kind of went from one point to another.

Example: Bob and Belinda had finally started to date. They were going to go out and eat food at the restaurant across the street. etc. etc. (Does that make sense? Anyway it gets slightly monotonous)
You could fix it by putting in a little more detail and just make it flow..
Example #2: Finally, Bob and Belinda were dating. They had planned to eat at Belinda's favorite restaurant, and Bob couldn't wait! (That's not a very good example, but what ever. There only so much I can say about Bob and Belinda's date in twp sentances :P )

I enjoyed reading your story very much, and what I complained aobut didn't really bother me. Your was wonderful, and I will most likely read more of your stories. :D I just hope you don't hate me forever for critiquing your work. Just some suggestions from one writer to the next.

Good luck, and continue writing,
Serene-Moon-Princess

The way you wrote it was really funny. I feel so sorry for Bob and I don't feel sorry for Link and Zelda the day after. *still laughing* What irresponsible parents! XD

lmao, poor bob, er poor hyrule too :O