YES!YOU WROTE!THANK
YOU!

yay! get more insperation (write more!)

o. kreepy, i like so far. is saki's power going to be a bigger thing in this story? since no one ever really makes it a big thing i was just wondering. keep writing! and update soon i really like this idea.

Hmm...nice. This going rather well. I'm not sure where you're going with Keoni and Saki meeting earlier than in the original, so can you reply letting me know your intensions.

Besides that, it's nice to see more between Keoni and Reiana which is going to add a lot of depth to whatever happens later on.

Good work. Keep it up.

=I=

little diffrent but good.
i aprove

This is VERY good. I know you asked me for help and I will continue reading this.

Please continue. It'd be a shame not to see how this Koeni is compared to the original.

Regards, Inquisitorchass

*whistles impressively* I know I'm going to like this story. This first chapter's really good, and it started at the very beginning when Ki was just a little baby (and now we know exactly what happened to Reiana and how she 'escaped' from the Sohmas)