Omg-sh... *sighs feelin' all warm and friggin' fuzzy again* Sonuvabitch... I remember readin' this WAY back in the day... And babe, it's AMAZING. I hate you and your awesomeness...'cuz I'm gettin' all kinds of ideas now... SO YOUR FAULT! *Grins deviously and scampers off...*

I have to say I don't totaly agree with the first reviewer. I dont think it sucked, there were a few things I don't agree with but for the most part I really liked it.

O.k, I have to agree with you, this one does suck. Not because you're not a good writer--you definitely have basic talent to write a good story. But, I'm sure you recognize that Riddick is totally out of character here. He would never be so emotionally open and aware of his own feelings. If he wanted Jack, he'd be insanely jealous and possessive maybe, but I doubt he'd realize he loved her--that feeling is just foreign to him.

The hardest thing about writing fan fiction is keeping true to a character someone else created rather than making the character do and say what we'd like him to do. Anyway, you've got a nice writing style, so I am looking forward to reading the other stories you posted.