Nomine is actually spelled Namine. Sorry I'm so picky, it just really bothers me. LoL

I am really enjoying your story

Your story has a wonderful plot, very interesting. One thing you should consider doing is use spell check often. I usually do that whenever I'm writing a chapter for any of my stories at least once every paragraph or so. Also, punctuation and proper capitalization would be effective too. I only saw a few instances of that. Other than those minor but blemishing flaws it is a story worth the read.

you said that the spelling would be correct, it isn't u instead of you? rite instead of right? it is your first story, but your in college? you should work on your spelling and grammar. other than that this seems like a decent story good work for your first fanfic, and trust me i'm only a critic, if i tred to write i probably be ten times worse than you

This is actually pretty good! :)