Fantastic, I really liked this. Fran is complex and somewhat... enigmatic? But you pulled her off well.

skillful, short, and a gorgeous interpretation of Fran & Balthier's relationship. :)

I think the terse tiny paragraphs work very well for a recounting of Balthier and Fran's relationship told from Fran's perspective. I really enjoy the way you turn a phrase and I love the parallelism you use when contrasting Fran's and Balthier's different areas of expertise when it comes to beasts.

I love that Fran punches him when he makes his first move and that she can tell he's tolerable when the urge to punch him subsides. I highly enjoy the little gift, it seems very like something Balthier would do unexpectedly. I love that Fran acknowledges she isn't fully off her guard with him yet. This is lovely.

Hahahah! I loved how you called it BUNNY SEX! Well, I really like this couple for reasons unknown to me. Maybe it's because of how she can handle him so easily...or something...I don't know.

But ANYWAYS! I really enjoyed reading this! If you make anymore, I would more than willingly read them! :DD

Very nice. I do like Balthier's misinterpretation in the third one quite amusing. Nicely done!

I just love this. That is all I can say.

Ah yes, another wonderful acomplishment. I do wonder why you knock fanfiction so harshly on your bio. It can be every bit as taxing, if not more so than writing an actual novel. I've done both! The publishing world I'm not so familiar with, but hey, all good things deserve a little hard work! I look forward to more fics from you!

At first, I was skeptical of this, as I am of most B/F fics. Yours was surprisingly good. It takes real talent to make decent work of a medly of sentences such as this, and I found myself enjoying every little snippet.

You get an A+

I absolutely love it!
It definitely takes skill to make such a complete story out of so few sentences.
Not to mention, the lines were great and left me either laughing or going 'Aw'.

"At first he badly misinterprets her intent, but after peeling himself off the deck and wiping most of the blood from his nose, agrees."

Priceless!

:p

Absolutely amazing. Instant favourite. :)

Beautiful grammar and wording was perfect. Loved this fic very very much.

KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK! :D

Really amazing. You had so many incredible lines in this fic! Keep it up. You write Balthier and Fran perfectly.

instant favourite. the epitome of short and very very sweet.

You know, I wasn't sure when I saw this but I gave it a chance. It was really nice to read, good change of pace. I loved the lines you used like 'And what kind of leading man would I be if I were lax in my duty to rescue the damsel? he says, and winks at her over the inert body of the couerl.' Just great!

i really really really liked this. i was admittedly skeptical at first, knowing its difficult to get a decent storyline in 12 sets of a few sentences put together. but you do it with such elegance and humour that i am completely in love with this story =) you drew out their characterizations so well, providing a plausible explnantion of their relationship. its really all a fran/balthier fan can ask for. i really do hope youll write more.

Strangely sweet, and funny, too. I like it.