Beautiful story. Your references to fire-burning, embers, and roaring flames-describe his kisses and the feelings she had inside her body.

Constructive criticism-

I imagine that Grissom had a hard time opening the door with a 'king'. He needed a 'key'.

Check the dictionary-

You wrote/You should have written-

unmistakeable/unmistakable

brough/brought

This is very sweet-I love how Gris didn't care who saw him-what a story! LOL!

Thanks for the treat!

I wish I could write like that!