nice follow up. Naruto makes a good hokage.

hey awesome start! I was sad when I went to click he 'next chapter' button and got nothing! so I decided to review since I enjoyed it too much!hope you update again, it's got great flow!

Excellent chapter.

I hope that you continue, I would like to see where this goes.

Good luck & best wishes,

Hououza

nice new chapter cant wait for the next one

wow! nice! I thought Jiraiya was talking to somebody but he was just talking to himself. I've only realized that the second time I've read your story. But anyway, I liked the way you've written this one. Some stories have so long(too long description and other stuff) but this one is short, straight and well written, I like those writers who can do that without missing emotions and other important things. I also like what you thought about Jiriaya making/having a grave for Oro.

hehe, long rant but in short... i like this story

I quite like this, especially the ending. It seems very much in Jiraiya's character that he would mourn the loss of the friend he grew up with in such an ironic way as making a grave for the person Orochimaru once was.

Aaw... that was really sad but it was really nice at the same time. Good job, great work.

This was a beautiful story with wonderful images.

"The wind had just picked up and was tugging hard at Jiraiya's coat. Just like the guilt tugging on his soul" Very nice.

I think there were supposed to be two people here but I had trouble figuring out who the second person was (Maybe Orochimaru?) and who was saying what. It might help to tell uswho the other person is and put some tags at the ends of dialogue (Jiraiya said.)

If you wan't it to be uncertain who he's with you could change to Jiraiya's pov and use 'I' that way the pronoun 'he' won't be confusing.

Sorry for rambling like this -_-;; I loved your story so much! Keep writing!

aww...

Oh god. I actually cried while reading this. So sad.