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reader
2009-11-24 . chapter 68
im reading this on google docs as you suggested in your profile but it seems like your editing has taken out info later referenced in the story.

i was confused when molly was suddenly mentioned as ill or injured in about chap 16 ish but it was not mentioned how that happened or when, she was at the meeting with arthur in the ministry when the DE's we going to take over then later harry/hermione visit the burrow and she is upstairs in bed.

also later near chap 20 there is mention of rescheduling an appointment with a wizard barrister that mr weasley recomended but no mention of a first attempt at the appointment.

there are a few other hints of missing thins also that makes the story a bit confusing. in general however im enjoying it, just hope you can fill in the blanks.
reader
2009-11-24 . chapter 1
im readint this on google docs as you suggested in your profile but it seems like your editing has taken out info later referenced in the story.

i was confused when molly was suddenly mentioned as ill or injured in about chap 16 ish but it was not mentioned how that happened or when, she was at the meeting with arthur in the ministry when the DE's we going to take over then later harry/hermione visit the burrow and she is upstairs in bed.

also later near chap 20 there is mention of rescheduling an appointment with a wizard barrister that mr weasley recomended but no mention of a first attempt at the appointment.

there are a few other hints of missing thins also that makes the story a bit confusing. in general however im enjoying it, just hope you can fill in the blanks.
sabitha
2009-11-23 . chapter 68
I love your story. I hope you continue to post. The delay between the previous two chapters was sad, and did slightly discourage me from continuing to read. However, I would love to see how this novel works itself out.

One thing I have noticed is the start and incomplete finish of your plot lines. For making a deal about 3 dates etc between Hermione and Harry, it was dropped quickly in the mist of the story. Maybe rereading what you have already written will help with the continuation of plots.

On a whole I think your story is well written. Compared to many stories out there, there are few- if any- grammar mistakes and the story is easy to follow. I must say that no matter how long it does take to post the next chapter, I will continue to follow your story.
Mona Ogg
2009-11-23 . chapter 68
Thanks for this great chapter! I'm glad that you're still updating this story.

2009-11-23 . chapter 68
I've been eagerly awaiting the meeting for the treaty since I read about it several chapters ago. Some things confuse me, like the Bruces, but I'm sure if it is important I'll figure it out.

I've been reading this over the last few days and finally reached the end. I'm glad that I found this link as it is a wonderful story. I've had some really good laughs. The only thing I note is that the days seem really, really long. Sixty-Eight chapters and it's only July 13th?

You said this takes place in 2007, right?

I'm reminded of the fall of the Templars and such.

Well, keep up the good work, this is an entertaining story and I eagerly await chapter 69 *snort* There's my own immaturity showing through :P
Jimm
2009-11-22 . chapter 68
Nice chapter, thanks for sharing it with us.
SomeGuyFawkes
2009-11-22 . chapter 68
Thanks for the update.
Shaggy37
2009-11-21 . chapter 68
Outstanding chapter! Will we be seeing Magicals come out of the castle? Do keep up the outstanding work and update soon please!:):):):)
twistyguru
2009-11-21 . chapter 68
happy, happy, happy! Another chapter, and it's every bit as good as the rest.
Oh, but you're evil for the cliffy you left hanging. We can only hope that it will resolve itself soon (in the next chapter)!
WiFi Reader
2009-11-21 . chapter 1
I saw your story recommended at the end of Old Crow's story. I've read this one and enjoyed it alot.
erikatristens
2009-11-21 . chapter 17
i have a quick question- is the mr. jenkins in ch 17 in any way derived from the j. jenkins of breaking dawn?
peruvianprincess
2009-11-21 . chapter 68
Good to see you're back on track. Thanks for the update. Lokin forward to the next installment.
witowsmp
2009-11-21 . chapter 68
Interesting end.
Well, I guess Draco won't be raping or robbing anymore, and the Malfoy line looks like it will end.
I enjoyed the chapter and look forward to the next.
Gweasley
2009-11-21 . chapter 68
Please update! You can't just leave it there, what hapens next?!
Wolfric
2009-11-21 . chapter 68
Good chapter. Bad end to Draco, couldn't happen to a nicer guy. It is nice to hear from you again. Thanks for writing. W.
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