you know it's rude to keep people waiting!

please update :)
I want to know what happen

Ah! What Happened?
Please update...

Good luck with the story...can't wait to read more!

Update please update. I had this story in my LJ message box but forgot to read it, so glad i did now though. keep up the good work.

and remember A+C forever, incase you forget.

Jessica

Ah! so interesting. can't wait to read more. thanks!

cagalli's missing? was she kidnapped? please no...i mean
please please no. i don't think athrun has the mind to
go and find cagalli AND complete nicol's funeral piece.
please post soon. ;]

oh no! a cliffie! I think it's a pretty good story you got going on. update soon!

What search? What's going on that Kira's so nervous?
Great beginning, update soon.

Oh! I think i know what Yzak and Shiho are talking about! I"m excited!

Interesting indeed, keep up the good work!

what happened next??! please updtae soon! story's really good

*poke* you have to continue this!! is greato! *-*

This is a good story! What's going to happen? I want to know! ^o^"

Hm... about your writing, I don't notice anything "pathetic". But since this story is more descriptive, with little conversations between characters, I do seem to notice that you have a higher tendency to start a new sentence with "He". When I read it, it's like: "*He* blah blah blah... (full stop) *He* blah blah blah... (full stop) *Athrun* blah blah blah..." Yeah. Perhaps if you kind of changed the wording and strung the sentences together, it wouldn't be so... repetitive. Apart from this, though, I can't find any fault in your writing. The vocabs are good, it's very descriptive, and the plot's interesting, so don't feel too worried about it! ^^

Anyway, those are just my opinion, you can ignore me (I'm DEFINITELY not an expert on writing :P). Everyone's style is different so... Just write in the way you like, I say! ._."

Oh... You've sucked me into completing this, especially when I was vaguely contemplating not finishing this when I saw the alert.

I like it! Can't wait till the second half comes out.