elo great story needs more leamon though... But otherwise great story! *sticks thimb out like Gai from Naruto*

love it

Just so you know, I did love it, it felt like an actual episode. But I couldn't help but notice grammar errors and such. Anyway, forget about that, I love the Mao/Okamura pairing, though before I read this, I'd forgotten the reporter guy's name, so we just labeled him 'reporter guy' ^^; Anyway, thanks for this. I liked the plot twist at the end with Nathan. I love Nathan. XD

good story

Okay, no, it's not your style of writing. You would be a great author if your grammar wasn't so bad. It's not a style, it's problem you need to work with.

Yeah, I know about the sex stuff. It is hard unless you're there, or have done it before. Just keep working.

great story! really like it! i dont no why but i really like it! well please update as soon as u can! please!

Okay, FIRST of all, you need to SERIOUSLY grammar check your work. The grammar in this was SO terrible, I don't even think I was reading the English language. Actually, I don't think I was READING it, I think I was DECIPHERING it. So yeah. Work on that.

SECONDLY, during the sex scene. What the hell? I could barely tell they were even DOING it, let alone enjoy it as a piece of literature. Please work on your use of the ENGLISH language.

i think that was forever hold your peace in the marriage part well western style but yeah well i really got excited when it was the wedding ceremony already! and i think ur an excellent writter because only they can make the readers feel the emotions as one of the characters themselves

i really liked this chapter it was really good

Good ending,but over much too fast.Please consiter some kind of sequal.Please?
Keep writing!

good job actually fabulous job i loved it

NOO! I CANT BELIVE ITS DONE!AK! MAKE A SEQUELL! PLEASE! =D beautiful story.

Yay they had moments! Update soon and put more=)! I love your story so much!

wow, you're story's so sweet! i absolutely love hagi, he's just so awesomely... well, awesome. you've done a really good job with keeping the characters in character, and i can't wait till your next update! keep up the good work!

well written i love the plot you should have someone read it other than your self before you post you seem to have the same problem as me with leaving words out and or useing the wrong words in surten places but over all well written lemon was good and oh yaeh keep up the great writting you have lots of potential!