So sweet

Awesome...

I'm not actually a fan of Hitsu/Matsu fics but this one is really good! Great work!

*Sound of heart breaking* Aw, I love this story, kinda wish this could lead on to more chapters. Amazing work *tear* Just amazing :)

Ahh... so cute:) And wonderful everything you write is wonderful. Bravo!

Wow, That was great. Keep it up!

It was a little too...flowery during the part where you described her crying away every sin and the "utter bliss" phrase. It seemed as if you were trying to force it to work. But after that..I think you accomplished the close relationship they share by just one scene-when he picks up the bottles and pulls one away from her hand. Now that was intimate, but in a subtle way. There's just something about that motion...just wow. The last line sealed if off simply because it's true. Great story.

That was beautifully written. A wonderful insight into their relationship.

Very lovely. This piece showcases well how Hitsugaya may look like a child but is far more mature than many in Sereitei. Nice work.

-sniff- I wanna cry now, but I just did my make-up for a party. . That was just... very touching. Totally awesome. You rock. :D

That was sweet.

I couldn't quite tell if you were going for HitsuMatsu as a romantic pairing or more as a platonic friendship thing, which was interesting, as most of the fics I've read here dealing with them are relatively clear-cut and put into their respective places.

At any rate, I had never really considered the deeper side of their relationship in this light, and now I feel inspired to do something angsty with the two.

Perfect spelling and grammar and all that jazz.

10/10

More, please?

Whisper

Hey again,

All compliments eh?

Well I took another look.. to offer a bit of the so called concrit if I could :)

There are no hitches in terms of word choice and as i've already said, the imagery is impeccable. Its the flow that got a little jerky in 1/2 points.

For instance *He hated each and every tear that broke away from her resolve. And yet he loved them for all that they held in their short-lived but meaningful existence.* is such a powerful and evocate para.. but the force gets lost come end of the second sentence. Break a rule or two.. break up the sentence.. fragmentation would make it so much faster. (Just my stupid opinion, mind you _)

It was fun reading this again.. and i hope I could be of a little help.

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That was so sweet.:)) Words actually fail. I can easily imagine it actually happening.

nya kawaii! write more HitsuMatsu cause there is NOWHERE near enough of it!

BlackAngel

awesome story! i love the platonic matsu x hitsu relationship. although i'm not sure whether or not you wanted to make it platonic...oh well. great job anyways )

I really liked it!_ I am putting this in my Favorites!