Want more please! Ive had this story in my bookmarks for ages now and finally sat down to read it all in one piece...literally. Two days later and it's still like a drug! Please update soon!

Yowza. I came onto FFN this weekend, found new chapters (I think I missed 20 somehow when you posted it), and sat down to reread the entire story. And... well, wow! This is turning out to be more and more interesting, and the way you weave in the the events from the beginning of the show is great! And the slightly twisted (from Beka's point of view, anyway) relationship between Charlemagne, Dominique, and Beka is highly interesting, as well as the whole situation between not only them but Tyr's rapidly aggregating group. I'm really intrigued by this, and really looking forward to the next chapter. Thank you so much!

UPDATE! YAY! Glad to see you didn't abandon this story! Liking the Charlemagne. You totally got the character. Wish Tyr or Harper would make another appearance though. I miss my favorite Niet
Interesting take on the Castallian situation. Thanks for the re-cap at the beginning too. Really helped.

I love this story! I'm so glad to see that you updated and this story wasn't abandoned. That being said, what is Tyr up to now? I was pleasantly surprised by your portrayal of him and now I want him back. Charlemagne and the jeans was an interesting touch and I totally see him trying to impress by wearing something like that. Well done. Also love your take on Beka. It's nice to see the self-serving freighter captain that first made me love her in first and second season. Especially impressed by your characterization in the beginning. Now that it seems Tyr might be getting brought back, I'm stoked. Can't get enough of their "If only things were different..." relationship. Poor Beka, all her relationships are doomed to fail and she knows it.

Very good. You need to finish this and quickly please.

Choosing between Tyr and Charlemagne? That sounds very difficult. As in, mental breakdown status.

But if Charlemange was the one who was there- wife or no wife, I'd pounce.

Same to Tyr.

Gah, so attractive!

Anyway, beautiful story, and I hope you update soon!
amanda and Lanco(the duck)

Ouch. Poor Beka, she's having a rough time with her Nietzscheans!
I give up, though, what's the landscape? Although colors aside, for some reason I'm thinking of "Mary Poppins" after they've jumped into the sidewalk art.

[silently grins and almost-chuckles] I love that ending line.

With what you said about it being not too tight a plot, I now realize what strikes me a so familiar about this story. It's the inconsistent scene shifts (that sometimes need clarifying sooner in the scene than they receive) and sometimes unclear dialogue and thoughts (that read as if the reader is supposed to have enough to figure out what's going on but they don't). I sometimes have similar problems with my more convoluted and re-interpretive fanfics. (All mine tend to be weird, but some are *really* weird.)

For what it's worth, I LIKED the input from red Trance; it just needed something at the beginning of that scene to state that was wear it was.

As a stylistic note, there's something you might want to consider in your dialogue. You sometimes make it unclear who's speaking because in surrounding sentences within the paragraph the subject is someone else. I can clarify and provide examples and the grammatical explanation if you need them.

Keep writing!

-Misti

Okay, I'm reviewing here before my brain shuts down as it's about to and I forget all those nice specifics I was going to say.

First, I very much like your writing style overall. Your introduction with Trance was excellent as a prologue.

Second, I specified "overall"... Your scene shifts are a bit awkward in that you don't provide the information you should. For example, when we hear from the red Trance again, we have to *guess*, you don't hint or state it. You also have a tendency to leave the reader confused about a scene's location until the middle of the scene.

But your sense of words and ability to weave tension is much better than most fanfics, and you know how to write properly to my distinct relief. (My apologies if that sounds rude; it's seriously past my bedtime, and I'm one of those grammar-oriented freaks.)

Keep writing!

-Misti

P.S. YOU KILLED ROMMIE! (Excuse me while I clear my throat.) That's more of a silly (non-)"complaint" stemming from avatar-Rommie being my favorite character, followed closely by Trance. (Though it's weird, since I don't think it's possible for an artificial life form to achieve sentience… See, I'm getting hyperanalytical. Told you it was past my bedtime.)

Anyway, you may have killed Rommie, but I can't see your story working without that. I was upset for all of four… minutes… but I'm a big girl and don't collapse into a bubbling heap when the writer keeps her story's logic intact at the expense of fans' obsessions.

Am I even making sense any more?

If not, sorry. If so… I'm not sure if I should be worried or even more sorry…

Wow, Beka and her Nietzscheans...And I'm sorry Trance and Harper left, I would have liked to see more of them. And yeah, he would never have gotten any closer to telling than saying that he wished she was Nietzschean. ;)

I love your story. I read all the chapters but came back to this one to review to comment on a specific thing. The thought that Tyr's statement regarding wishing beka was a neitzchean was 'as close as he ever would to telling her he loved her' is very true. I always thought that but had never found anyone who agreed with that idea. :-)

I'm guessing Beka's going to regret that last statement.

Um... wow. That whole chapter was kind of unexpected.

Actually, the quote I was referring to was what Tyr told her at the end of the chapter. But I'm glad you appreciate them, you're welcome. Believe me, it's only because you do such a good job with your stories.
And regarding this chapter, I have a feeling that kicking him out will come back to bite in the end. And I'm kind of curious about Trance here.

And now a Firefly reference. I think I might have to pay homage to you now.
So the tables turn. Interesting... And I love the way you keep throwing in comments about actual episodes. This is what fanfic is supposed to be.