This is really good
It's nice to get some insight into Jessie's life.

Please write more!

Woo for this world, you've made it real and I want it XD

You've really created a good atmosphere in this chapter, looking forwards to the next chapter XD

This is a great idea, Jesse Biggs and Wedge don't get much attention which is a shame. I love the slum slang, it really gives the story character, makes it really feel like the slum. I'll be waiting for updates!

I'm really liking the story. Mr Ignis is interesting for a crazy old man that makes bombs. Keep it up!

It was good. Got a bit hard to read near the end, with it being one line all the time. Apart from that I liked it. I look forward to the next part.