love the story! i accually cried at the end of it. just one question, was the dog Horace?

This was awesome!

This is the most emotionally-packed 13 Ghosts fic I've read, and the only Horace-centered one. And I must say that I am utterly in love with it! I adored the different views you offered of the Juggernaught, and am entranced with your oc. A very cute, but sad story. Hoping to read the sequel soon. Awesome job. =)

Oi! Good opening... I must be honest though, I really hated the original movie and that's lowering my motivation to read a story based on the movie...

But hey! I'm liking it, and if I pretend it's an original story, and not fan fiction, then it's all good!

There were grammar/spelling errors, but who am I to talk? And what piece of writing doesn't have a few typos? Well, I'll try to read more later. Great first chapter!

Aw... very nicely writen, but it's so sad!

Nice to finally read a story from a fellow c2 staff member, and I liked it,... except for the fact that mass serial killers don't often talk about love quite like that.It's a good plotline, and all, though. I actually have a story on the breaker myself, if you're intrerested. Horace breaks some bones.

Fantastic!! This is beautifully written and the use of the songs go along with the theme. You give a whole new take on The Juggernaut in a way few can do. A very bittersweet ending but hopefully it will get better in Horace your sequel to this. I can almost feel Molly's loneliness and pain. Please start the sequel soon!

PLEASE OH PLEASE DON'T END IT LIKE THIS! I need to know if he sees her. I want to see him happy and her to when they see each other. PLEASE!

Please! Don't you dare leave it like these! Let my adored Breaker have some m,ore love in his afterlife (aside from the love of his fangirls)

More! it's taking an interesting sweet rythm...

thank you for the mention, :) but really you should thank yourself for writing such a captivating story! great work on chapter two.

I love stories about Horace, the first chapter really leaves you wanting more!

Very well written, most OC fanfictions has grammar worse than mine. But this one uses proper English. Great job with your ability to edit. OCs like this are every rare.

Yet I do have to say something bad about the fanfiction. My creative writing teacher says that I have to say somthing good then bad about a story. I may say that how you make Horace is not that beliveable. I useally imagine him as someone who breaks spines and try to kill people. Not really someone who would take in a little girl. Yet then again the ghosts' personality are not established in the movie. You could make any ghost in Thir13en Ghosts any way you want. But it wouldn't be very viable.