|Reviews for Lost soul|
| Kiue Jin 5/21/13 . chapter 117
“Anarchy wears two faces, both creator and destroyer. Thus destroyers topple empires; make a canvas of clean rubble where creators then can build another world. Rubble, once achieved, makes further ruins' means irrelevant.
Away with our explosives, then!
Away with our destroyers! They have no place within our better world.
But let us raise a toast to all our bombers, all our bastards, most unlovely and most unforgivable.
Let's drink their health...
then meet with them no more.”
A V for Vendetta quote true, but I feel it sums up this wonderful, touching story quite nicely. More then once I was nearly brought to tears, even more so near the end. The way you wrote this story made me care about the characters in it, made me feel their hopes, their dreams and their pain and I was honestly brought close to tears when their world started to fall apart around them. Their losses meant more to me then they honestly should have considering that I know that they are fictional characters and I'm not afraid to admit it.
Bravo good sir. You are a great author and I honestly feel ashamed of the crap I've written when compared to yours.
| Blackrazgriz 5/20/13 . chapter 117
SPOILER: Any one reading this particular review before reading the story, please skip over it until you have completed the story.
Okay. Wow. This is an amazing story. I was hooked on since reading chapter 1, and its been one hell of a ride. The amazing battles. The stellar character development. The dark overview. Everything.
The wars was amazing and well detailed. I enjoyed reading the battle plans, how the battles were fought, what each leader did, etc. etc.
Of course, this story is not perfect. One of the most irritating points of this story was the fact that Sasuke just disappeared from the face of the earth. Jumps over the wall of the Uchiha Clan Compound and that's it. No more is said of him for the remainder of the entire story. He's only mentioned for the first time in like 50-60 chapters at around chapter 80, and then once again in like chapter 110 or something like that. No he didn't die. No he just fucking disappeared. His fate left up to the reader's imagination. Hell, he could have been kidnapped by fucking aliens and taken to planet Krypton for human experimentation and shit. That was really, really bad. Everyone of your characters had amazing amount of spotlight: Naruto, Temari, Hinata, Kakashi, the Konoha refugees, the OC Kages, Akina, Pein, Kisame, Itachi, etc. etc. Except Sasuke.
It could have been so simple to explain his whereabouts. Naruto: "So, have you found a trail for the nuke nin Uchiha Sasuke?" Anbu/ hunter nin: "Yes Hokage-sama. Sasuke has been successfully found and eliminated. His body has been disposed of, and we have retrieved his Sharingan from the corpse." Naruto: "I see. You may leave."
Simple as that. No. Sasuke had to never be reintroduced again. Ultimately, you are the author, so what you do is what you want to do. I can't complain much further, but please do not do this again. If you don't want Sasuke in your story, don't include him. You didn't include Yamato, never mentioned Kabuto, the Jinchuuriki were all sealed off, etc. etc.
Aside from that, you had some amazing plot/ character development. I love the question of the cage bird being a major motif in this story. The answers that the characters each give is representative of their character as a whole, and how they truly feel about Naruto as a person. It was wonderful and well done, well implemented.
The Naruto/ Temari relationship was a major factor on why I did not want to read this story in the first place. But after finally growing the balls to try it out, I find myself content with it. It's brought up very well especially the whole Stockholm syndrome thing. It's realistic, and most importantly, it works. Good job to you.
Hinata's death. I was listening to fucking Unwavering Emotions from Pokemon Black and White while reading that scene. And I did not feel a thing. Nothing. I may be a stone cold bastard, but I felt it just wasn't written well enough for it to have any emotional impact on me. I'm sure others would disagree with me, but I certainly did not feel as saddened by her death as I originally thought I would. In fact, I was pretty much prepared and when it did happen, I just cruised right along.
I love how you put emphasis on Hanabi and her character immediately after Hinata's death, and she quickly grew to be one of my more favorite characters. A young, naive girl just getting her fight wet in the politics of war. Very well done.
Naruto's death. Just like Hinata's. Coulda saw it coming a mile away, as any one would have thought. I would have been surprised and relieved if he survived. But alas, such was not designed in your grand scheme of the world, and such was meant to be. I did not understand exactly how he died. Did he just transferred all of the Kyuubi's power to Pein and let him die from all that raw energy?
His after death, however, was much more meaningful. "Create a world where I cannot not exist." Wow, really amazing. Kinda cliched but still powerful nonetheless.
Kakashi's death. That was the most powerful, most emotionally devastating death I've read in this entire story. Done in three lines. No need for an entire chapter. It was short and simple, and the story just continued from there. But it was so amazing. I was holding back my tears when Kakashi died, somewhat happy that he's managed to get some of his regrets out of his chest. Kakashi is going to be missed badly. RIP
The Epilogue could have been longer. It could have explained who truly died and who survived. It could have explained the reactions of major supporting characters like Sakura, Lee, Tenten, Gai, etc. But it didn't. Just Hanabi, Gaara, Temari, and Akina. I was a little disappointed with that turn of events, but what can I do about it.
Overall, I was thoroughly satisfied with this story. I was forced to stop writing my own work so that I could focus my full attentions to this piece. Very, very well done. Thank you so much for the read.
| snickerslv100 5/18/13 . chapter 13
Well that was melodramatic... I like it.
| Samian 5/13/13 . chapter 117
This has truly been an experience to read.
A fanfiction story which has the potential to be a standalone.
Now I can ramble on about how good this was in my own eyes but that wouldn't really mean anything at all.
So I'll merely say.
Bravo you made something beatiful.
One question though: what happened to Sasuke?
| Angels will bleed from pain 5/11/13 . chapter 116
I wanted to cry to bad! This was a epic story!
| Airyballoon 5/9/13 . chapter 77
Yes! Finally getting down to the nitty gritty stuff. Kumo. Is. Finally. Falling! Naruto has won my love and respect a hundred times over; if only modern warfare tactics were this pleasing.
| Airyballoon 5/8/13 . chapter 69
Haha, I can never get over the hilarity of Naruto revealing he has a sister. I bet it'll be a fiasco when they find out the yondaime was his father!
| Yung Jon 5/8/13 . chapter 117
Possibly the best ever Naruto Fanfiction.
| UubPathnik 5/4/13 . chapter 1
I only wish this was more canon
| Mohammad.Alzo 5/4/13 . chapter 1
| CMVreud 5/3/13 . chapter 117
An, rather open, end. If I could say so. But fitting, so very fitting.
You know, there's just one thing, one thing I would've done, one step I would take farther.
I somehow thought that the one thing he said to her, which she won't tell the Kaz... Gaara, was as to how she would achieve the world where someone like he is not needed anymore.
She has Samehada, she has a room of all, of the rest, of the mightiest, of the most powerful, of the last shinobi with the right to bear that title...
The Legends of the common folk would do its work as those who survived witnessed most of it.
And the rest would forever lay under the sun and sand of Kaze no Kuni, somewhere...
| CMVreud 5/3/13 . chapter 116
Wow... what a finale.
| CMVreud 5/3/13 . chapter 115
Drama, more drama, excellent drama, oh what's this, cliffhanger drama.
| CMVreud 5/3/13 . chapter 111
An good chapter, the calm before the storm, preparations are made...
| Yuki-san loves KKM 4/29/13 . chapter 32
I started reading this a few hours ago, after I ready your Naruto/Inuyasha crossover. I'm really sorry to say that I'll have to stop reading here. I might pick it up again one day but I can't bring myself to finish reading this now for several reasons.
First is just that it's too long and too sad so I'm getting depressed the more I read. Second is that... well, I know you started writing this back in 2007 when Shippuden was just starting so I understand the use of OCs for characters like the other Kage but I can't seem to bring myself to tolerate it. It's more of my problem really.
I'm not saying the story is bad. 10,000 reviews is proof that your story is very good. I really liked the concept. I just wish that I read this earlier when I wasn't so updated with the manga or that you wrote this later, when most of the truths in canon were already revealed. I just really like stories that follow canon unless they're either a complete AU or if canon just doesn't feature too prominently in the story (like in Naruto of the Shikon).
I did read the epilogue of your story though. Like I said, I might continue reading when I feel like it, I'm certainly intrigued by how the story ended or I might not, just because the epilogue was just too bittersweet.
Please keep writing. :)