Aww, poor Jonathan! He wants a destiny too! Ardeth was very sweet and gentle with him so now I want to hug them both! I thought perhaps the *three sides* comment refered to the pyramid's triangular shape when facing it directly. But no-one thinks of Egypt when someone says triangle lol.

Yes! I really like this story! _ It's very well written. Oh, and about that 'a pyramid has four sides, not three'? Do you think that maybe they made a mistake and were refering to the triangle shape the side of the pyramid makes instead of the actual number of sides? Sure, it doesn't make much sense anyway, but at least that point of view doesn't make them look like the people who horribly failed geometry. Anyways, great job on the story! Ciao for now! _

Excellent, excellent piece of work. Your Jonathan was very in-character, and maybe even a little deeper, which was really great. The interaction between he and Ardeth was well-written, and I really liked the idea of Ardeth giving him a little nudge in the right direction, fictional though it may be. Very in-character, indeed.
Bravo!
Phantom

"But pyramids have four sides. What about the last side?" you know, i did notice that. and i was kind of wondering what was up with ardeth that he couldn't notice that a pyramid has 4 sides. maybe they dont stress the (nonexistant) importance of geometry in med-jai school.

poor angsty jonathan. john hannah is so cool. scottish accents are fun.

"money and/or a girl."" and/or is such a useful phrase, and most fun to use in conversation. such as, i would greatly enjoy having johnny depp and/or hugo weaving in my closet.

"He nodded, his head bobbing up and down like a puppet's on a string. "Good idea, that,"" such great jonathan. makes me want to watch TMR. perhaps i shall.

i love the whole jonathan's destiny thing. maybe now he wont be a drunk anymore. twould be nice.

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I do love Jonathan, and his jolly, blumbering self. My favourite character in the movie! I do, however, love the Jonathan you created all the more. He's deeper, and I like that he realizes what he must look like, always scuttling about bars and picking up girls. Great writing! Everything is very easy to understand, and it makes me all emotional. Poor ol Jonathan! It's bloody time someone wrote a fiction like this one.

Cheers,

M.O.

Great job.

very good

I loved it! You made Jonathan better than in the movie! Keep up the really

good work!

YEEEESSSSSSS! At last! Revenge for Jonathan! I loved it!

I like this story very much, and I liked it even better after I read the sequel. You made me like Jonathan! Go figure. ;-)

Excellent story... Then again, I'm a bit biased because I love anything that centers on Jonathan. ;) He's such an understated character. Anyway, I'm off to read the sequel now, and then I'll no doubt do much begging for more. ::grin::

Fabulous! I've been waiting and waiting for a good Jonathan-centric piece like this one - you've more than satisfied this reader. The interaction between Ardeth and Jonathan was superbly done - great work! _

Yea! Jonathan has a purpose! Horray! I liked that!

A great, serious look at Jonathan and the thoughts that might haunt him. His interaction with Ardeth was terrific. He always seems to be left on the sidelines. He deserves so much more. Thanks. Write more, please.

This is an excellent story! It really develops Jonathan's character - it shows that those who play the buffoon are often sad & lonely underneath, maybe full of regret. The interaction between he and Ardeth is so poignant - I can just imagine Jonathan squirming, blustering & nattering away while Ardeth merely says a few well-chosen things.