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Miss DnG 2008-07-14 ch 16,	abuseGreat story! :)
aynomayac 2007-10-18 ch 16,	abuseyou made me cry couple of times. this story is far beyond amazing. thank you so much. keep writing. aynomayac
milmirjia 2007-07-03 ch 16,	abuseHi Briana! I just finished reading your fanfiction. I thought it was a good idea, with the seperation of Ranma and Akane, but still some things just didn't work out for me. For example you're writing that Ranma leaves Akane on the altar just because he saw her kissing Ryoga. Well, normally, Ranma would have torn Ryoga into pieces for something like that. But I know, it's fanfiction and the author can do as he pleases. You're no native speaker, right? Well, I'm none either but I just couldn't help but notice the grammatical mistakes you made. Maybe next time you should look for a beta reader. I'm sure there are plenty willing to do this job and it would increase the quality of your stories a lot. Just think about it. Bye, milmirjia
thereviewergirl 2007-03-28 ch 16,	abusei love the story and everything but the ending kinda made it like ranma loves hitomi more than akane... it's like he values her more than akane... maybe it's just me but i don't know... that's just what i felt when i was reading the story... i think it's because you ended it with a ranma/hitomi scene instead of a ranma/akane scene... but i still think the fic is wonderful... i wanted to kick ranma's ** when he suddenly realized what a fool he's been... wasting 7 years like that... congratulations on your successful fic! :p
The Rabid Badger 2007-03-26 ch 16,	abuseA very nice ending!
jdcocoagirl 2007-03-26 ch 16,	abusewow 11-16, great chapters. kinda bit feel un ended. love that ranma settles his heart to akane. and settle is old life with hitomi to. it feels like its a begining of new chapter. i like chapter 15 the most because of the raw emotion you built around the characters and their reactions.
Andreiush 2007-03-18 ch 10,	abuseWHAT KISS?? How can u leave it at that! OMG what a cliffhanger! I'm really into this story by now, but i think u should really get someone to help you with your grammar, this story could be so much better if u could get around that problem.. just think about it! and keep updating this cuz it's getting really interesting!
jdcocoagirl 2007-03-18 ch 10,	abusewow 9-10 awesome. i want to know if the other staff of the hospital knew that akane is spending time with ranma and know about their past. i'm also curious about this kiss hope it you write it in the next chappie as flash back. update soon
Matrias 2007-03-18 ch 10,	abuseI like it, but your spelling and grammar are kind of sloppy. You have missing words and the wrong tenses in places, and I feel you'd have a stronger piece of work if you spent more time proof-reading for these types of problems. Your biggest mistake is with how you close quotation marks. For example, “Akane, I’m not worried about that. I know you’ll take care of him.” The older woman said as she placed her hand to the younger one. is incorrect. It should be “Akane, I’m not worried about that. I know you’ll take care of him,” the older woman said as she placed her hand to the younger one. As it's an extension of the dialog, you wouldn't end the quotation with a period because you're still describing it. You'd only use a period and a new sentence if you're moving on to a separate statement. Like so, “Akane, I’m not worried about that. I know you’ll take care of him.” The older woman then placed her hand to the younger one. Kind of tricky if you're in the habit of doing it otherwise. My own pre-reader had to beat it out of me. Good luck, Kyle
The Rabid Badger 2007-03-17 ch 10,	abuseAh, the angst feeds my soul... Ehrm, anyway, good chapter.
thereviewergirl 2007-03-17 ch 10,	abusenow this is getting interesting... :p
MiriamBB666 2007-03-14 ch 8,	abuseWhat a good story. Please continue soon.
The Rabid Badger 2007-03-14 ch 8,	abuseYou just had to cut it of there, didn't you... Anyway, with the rate you are updating it's not really a problem. Great job!
blackbeauuty 2007-03-11 ch 6,	abuseLove it! Keep them comin =) lol
PheonixFarwind 2007-03-11 ch 6,	abusegood chapters. the chapters are a little short. keep up the good work.

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