I appreciate your attempt at humour but it would have been significally more funny if your title wouldn't have given away the punchline at the end.

In case this was intended, your Mary Sue wasn't exaggerated enough. Yours nearly felt like it could have come out of a serious attempt of a fanfiction. A longer introdution before the restaurant would have been nice too (like reactions of other teammates, ect. You can run wild here .-)

0_o

Dumbstruck.

i love koji sakai, and i love this fic. _ i think you totally captured his personality, and it's fun to imagine how he would have looked like while all of this was happening. too bad there aren't a lot of hungry heart fics around, ne? keep it up, you're good. :)

cool i think i'll make my own story about sakkai falling in love...

lol didn't figure it out til the end though.. nice fic

dat wasn't funny, nor was it complete

but i kinda liked it...only kinda

I loved it!

Mary: "You are so arrogant!"

I thought this was funny how SHE was the arrogant one in their conversation.

Poor Sakai..

ehi... i'm confused too...

Nice one! As you said ,we haven't had comedy for a long time .Anyway , how do you know aishwarya rai?Sorry to ask ,but im indian .:-)