Reviews for A Serpent's Sacrifice

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honore 2008-05-18 ch 45,	abuseSwet. I loved it I loved it I loved it. We are not worthy Dearheart, Thanks
Jimbocous 2008-04-23 ch 45,	abuseAlways wonderful to run across another author of your quality, in this case thanks to Chem Prof's recommendation. This story was just chock full of unique ideas and spins on canon, and very very well executed from start to finish. Thanks for a fantastic read, and I suspect in the future a reread or two. Looking forward to checking out your other work.
72bluebirds 2008-04-14 ch 45,	abuseLoved your story I hope you decide to write again. I especially liked the way you dealt with the horcruxes, Ginny and Ron. I definitely believe Rowling made an error pairing Ginny and Harry. It just doesn't make sense perhaps she tired of writing. I hope the writers in fan ficdom don't. Thanks for your hard work.
a reader 2008-02-03 ch 41, anon.	abuseI reall love your story. Although it is listed under Hermione Harry so i suppose they will eventually get together. That said I hate it when authors kill off Ginny so Hermione can be with Harry. Who the heck would want that? "Gee Darling I sure do love you although i wouldnt be with you if my real love had lived!" its like being choosen second and you cant compete with a dead person1? I hate it -.- I prefer Harry to have chosen Hermione and then possibly Ginny dying like that So at least we'd know he actually loved Hermione but nope now we have to think he loves Ginny and wants to marry her and Hrermione is his second. -.-
Ciroth 2008-01-22 ch 45,	abuseWonderful story. I am a Harry/Ginny shipper normally myself but this was wonderfully done.
hchan1 2008-01-21 ch 1,	abuseFantastic story. The romance was believable, the conflicts real, the characterizations spot-on. I could see the Dumbledore-sacrifice scene coming far in advance, but still shed a tear while reading it. Truly inspired work, trumps the real book 7 in my opinion.
Kaze Kami 2007-12-30 ch 45,	abuseI could gush endlessly about your incredible writing skill. I could drone on to infinity about the elegant wordplay and riviting story line displayed in this story. Though instead I will settle for one word. BRILLIANT! You are truely a great writer, may we all be aspired to be half as great.
Wendy 2007-12-30 ch 45, anon.	abuseOne of the best story's I've ever read! I couldn't stop reading, and my schoolwork suffered severely! But nevertheless I loved it! Wendy van 't Zand (You're fan from the Netherlands ;-))
Arcaellos 2007-12-18 ch 45,	abuseI really like your story, and consider it to be better then the actual book 7, and I would like to read more stories by you.
sparky40sw 2007-12-02 ch 45,	abuseI came to your story on a recommendation in the sisters of the write stuff yahoo group, and greatly enjoyed the story - the dialogue and characterizations felt appropriate to the ages of the personnages, the atmosphere was believable for a war time setting - Over all an excellent and worthwhile read. thanks for sharing your talent by the way, even after DH - Your version of Snape is considerably more believable than that of JKR warm regards
CedarPineSpruce 2007-09-22 ch 45,	abuseI enjoyed this story immensely. Thank you so much for sharing it. I dearly hope you continue writing. Take care. a hug in thanks
Llyod24 2007-09-20 ch 45,	abuseHi, this story got pretty high recommendations from the guys at DLP (at least for their standards)and I have to say that this story deserves it. It is a well rounded mix of all genres and it contains some true conflict, which cannot be said for most stories out there. Your characters were well thought-out and were nicely developed. They never behaved really OOC. Your plot contained some stuff which is overused, for example Dumbledore not being dead, but you made up for it, as you put your own spin into these parts and they developed both plot and characters. You didn't just include them because you could, but because they served a purpose. Killing off Dumbledore was also a nice action. Otherwise you plot seemed pretty unique for me (as unique as a horcrux-hunting story can be). It contained enough original aspects (although I would love to see a story, where RAB ist not Regulus, while everyone thinks its him, but the locket not being in Grimmauld Place was good enough). You had a nice build-up before the Horcruxes could be destroyed and you did not make Harry super-powerful or let him have an easy walkthrough. And you put enough focus on character-development and -interaction. Something which is also lacking in most stories with a decent plot. I guess that a lot of people didn't like the last chapters of the story as they seemed a little bit too angsty/fluffy and just didn't really fit with the rest of the story. But they were still well written and just showed that Harry is not perfect and the death of riddle doesn't sort all problems. But as it is such a different style, you probably should have finished Serpent's Sacrifice with Riddle's death and put the last 10 or so chapters in a mini-sequel. Your Snape-scene was brilliant too. Although it would have been even better if you would have put the two parts of the interrogation in two different chapters as to give the readers a small break and to add to the surprise of the readers, when finding out that Snape is actually as evil as he seems to be (especially when you are posting your work while still in process of writing the story). The only minor inconsistency I noticed was in the interrogation of Snape and Narcissa Malfoy. In Snape's you said that Veritaserum cannot be used until a few days after the his interrogation. With Narcissas's you let the Order offer Harry&co to let them interrogate her, but you didn't actually say, when they could question her with veritaserum again. It's unimportant as they didn't actually question her, but it's something I stumbled upon, which made me stop reading and think that something is wrong there. Maybe you shouls also think about adding that this is not a HG-story in your summary, as a lot of people are sick of those and it seems as if your story develops into one after reading the first few chapters. I believe that you probably lose a lot of readers that way. Another thing I have to compliment you on is your level of detail. You didn't go into too much detail (who cares about Bill's wedding-vows, the color of Ginny's shoes or the exact way Hermione made her hair every day...?), but you still put in enough that I had a clear picture of a lot of scenes in my mind while reading your story. Something which I really enjoyed, especially as I can't picture these in most stories I read. As I'm not a native speaker, I can't really comment on your spelling and grammar, but I could read your story fluently (except the Narcissa-Veritaserum-scene mentioned above) and I didn't find any major mistake. I think you had one it's-its-mistake, but it didn't really bother me and I can't remember where it is anymore. All in all this is a great story and I look forward to reading your other story. Thank you for writing this story! Lloyd24
Jarno 2007-09-11 ch 45,	abuseBeautifull story, masterfully crafted and close to my heart. Especially the later chapters where they make their way into the world. I have just turned 18 and while I will still see many of my friends on the train going to university, others I will not. In fact the year to come will be the first time I will not be in the same class with my best friend since kindergarden. So reading your story makes me kinda sad.
Moonlit Water Sunny River 2007-08-27 ch 45,	abuseNO! YOU CANT MAKE RON GO AWAY! RON! NOT RON! boohoohoo
Jazz 2007-08-17 ch 45, anon.	abuseThat was bloody brilliantt :) I'm not a fan of H/Hr but it was still great (y)

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