lol the last line was the best all women loved to be told that they hold their man's attention even when they are prego! lol

OMG this is my second time readin this story. It's really hilarious and stuff. Especially the last sentence of the last chapter. No matter how many women that fell to his feet she would always hold his attention, even when she was fat. ROFLMAO tat bit i laughed so hard, she can always get skinny again.

I read the comic it was funny and the story even funnier gaara on heat argh so funny ur grammar wasn't bad loved it.

LMAO! Poor Gaara! Shukaku's gonna kill him!

wow the ending sure was nice :D
love it! :]

Aw such a cute ending loved it!

omg i love this story its really funny awesome ending!

funny

lol

OMG THIS WAS GOOD
i totally love it!

Since I do not like leaving anyone misinformed, I'll just comment. For human females being in "heat" or ovulation does not occur during their period but rather two weeks prior to their period. The actual bleeding is caused by layers in the uterus being shed because the ovum was not fertilized before it reached the womb.

Male animals also goes into heat. It's easy to notice a female animal in heat, plus, she has physical signs of that; but males don't and that's what makes it hard to see, but they become a little more agressive in those days. Both female and male animals do.

About: 'Anyhow I would like to ask you all to back off my grammer, because I know it's not great so no need to tell me.'

When you wrote this story, you were 17, old enough to know how to write. It's a disrespect to us readers when authors say thinks like the line I mentioned before. Would you like to read stories where you find yourself wondering what a sentence really meant because of one or more words written incorrectly?
Just like 'Mistake', I kept reading because I wanted to know how it ended, but it's still annoying to read all the mistakes. If you get really tired after writing, then look for a beta reader, this web gives that service. But watch after your spelling and grammar.
If you gave a look at each finished chapter, you'll easily spot the mistakes and correct them in no time.

But i do think that the idea for the story was really good. But i think you could've written it better. i was hoping that as i read the whole story the writing would progress. but it didn't it stayed the same. i guess the people that absolutly adore this story don't care about how it's written and only like the concept of the story. that's cool but in a way that's cruel, They say they like your story, but don't say anything about your writing and how you can improve it. don't get me wrong i don't hate your story at all. i just think that if you edit it, and make the story flow better and if you practice writing i think this story will be amazing. The concept had so much potential. The next story you write please write re-read everyhing okay? i hope my advice (and my brutal honesty -_-) helps you become a better writer!
Ja! =}

lol funny story, but my fave part is the last few words 'even when shes fat' lol very funny!