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The Oracle Dragon 2007-08-03 ch 3,	abusegreat story! keep going!
The Oracle Dragon 2007-08-03 ch 2,	abusegood story!
The Oracle Dragon 2007-08-03 ch 1,	abuseGood story!
Viresse 2007-05-19 ch 4,	abusecan't wait to see actions in the next chapter. Can wait to see the twins fighting the demon. Tell me more about Elladan, anything will happen to him?
I.H.N 2007-05-18 ch 4,	abuseWell, your story is unusual, that has to be said. It is not badly written either, from a mechanical point of view, I believe. However, it does not look like your story is really set in Middle-earth. Chapter four tells me that you have read the Silmarillion (or at least done enough research to know a bit about the background of Middle-earth), but for some reason, it looks like you still underestimate the inhabitants of Middle-earth. Just because the flashy, fireball-slinging, demon-conjuring kind of magic does not exist in Tolkien's world, it does not mean that it's inhabitants are clueless. Glorfindel slew a Balrog, died, was reborn and can now ride against all of the Nine unarmed. Elrond is enhanced by a Ring of Power and is part Maia himself, and that's only two of several hundred Elves in Rivendell. It seems likely to me that these two, at least, could handle any demon that tries to sneak into Imladris (over which Elrond has a great deal of power, by the way) I would also like to point out, that rat-demons, butterfly-demons, and similar creatures do not exist in Middle-earth. I don't know from what world you have taken them, but they are not from Arda. Demons in Middle-earth are exclusively fallen divine powers, and not even the least of them are playthings, and they can't be summoned at will. It's said that it is possible to summon houseless spirits, but that takes training, in Tolkien's world, and is no inherent power, although inherent power seems to be required. Really, I deem that this story here would make a good original story, or if you want to write fanfiction, at least put your characters into their original habitat (some manga or anime? Far eastern mythology?). Middle-earth has it's own demons. There is no lack of nightmare-inducing things in Middle-earth, but I ask you to play by Tolkien's rules. You can't simply take features of one world and transplant them into another. Doing that only raises questions like: "How come that your "Oni-Kai" (a name that should not exist in Middle-earth, by the way) can summon demons that nobody else even knows about?" Or: "Where did that ''Golden Moon Order'' come from?" I don't ask you to stop writing this story, no. But if you want it to take place in Middle-earth, it has to be in context with the known history of that world. What are these demons anyway? Are they corruptions of Melkor? Remnants of 'killed', houseless Maiar? Corrupted Elven faer? So, finish the story, but as it is now, I miss the context. You have shown that this demon-possessed girl of yours is powerful and evil, but even chapter four failed to explain why. Give your story a solid connection to Tolkien's, please.
NazgulQueen 2007-05-18 ch 1,	abuseThis really doesn't belong in LotR, hon.
keyko101 2007-05-13 ch 1,	abuseYou have just proved the theory that there is no limit to human stupidity. Sonsasu, do yourself and everyone else a favor: disconnect your computer from the Internet. 'Cause you obviously can't remember to put ORIGINAL FICTION on FictionPress. Yeah, I'm so fucking sure that you don't care about the reviews. That's why you keep on deleting this and posting it back in. Enjoy yourself.
Galadel 2007-05-12 ch 1,	abuseWow. It seems you have a habit of posting your original fiction here and pretending it's LOTR just so you can get reviews! Well, I'm sorry to say that I'm afraid even though you hate flames, you'll be seeing a lot of them coming your way. -Gal
Ange De Mort La Pomme De Sa... 2007-05-02 ch 3,	abuseWell this is different... I think I like the chapter Broken Glass more. Keep it up. And ignore the idiot flamers. Half the time they can't tell their own backside from a hole in the ground. lol
jules14 2007-04-16 ch 3,	abuseOh, dear God. What can I say? If you HAVEN'T read any of the Tolkien books, then DON'T TRY WRITING ABOUT THEM, YOU DAMN IDIOT. You're offending people who actually HAVE read them, with all your Japanese-cannibalism-shit. And these aren't even Tolkien characters; they're characters that you put Tolkien character names to. Congratulations. I thought once that "An Elf's Love" was the vilest piece of shit ever to be vomited into the LOTR fandom, but I think this might take its place. There are just no words bad enough for you or this "story".
Yemi Hikari 2007-04-11 ch 2,	abuseWow. It is good, but as of this chapter it's gotten too dark for me. (I am not a horror buff. Sorry.) ... For those wondering about the whole Flame Rising thing, the reason the author said what she did originally is because Flame Rising is a bully. This person flames randomly and for no cause at all. This person also only hits stories that HAVE reviews. All you have to do is tick off this person. This person also has at least three accounts to flame with. There are also authors that have been so harshly bullied they have completly removed all their stories from the site. And ... this flamer doesn't care about wether the story is any good or not, nor does this person even bother to read teh story.
Profile formerly known as S... 2007-04-07 ch 2,	abuseAre you kidding me? How in all the Halls of Mandos is this anything to do with Lotr's, or anything Tolkien for that matter? You can't possibly have read any of the books, are you just using other bad fanfic as your reference? What's with all the Japanese anime nonsense? I'm going to tell you that if somehow this little demon infused twit came walking into the presence of Elladan and Elrohir, she would be mincemeat in no time flat. These are two thousand year old elves, highly skilled as warriors for over a thousand years, trained by Glorfindel and their father, both the best to be had. And they have had a personal beef with the powers of darkness for about five hundred years, so they are not so clueless as to be screwing around with Oni-Kai. Zip-bang, dispatched in a flash, three paragraphs and story over. This is crap, if you want to write original, have at it, just take it over to fictionpress, don't hang Tolkien character names on it and think we won't notice.
AWanderersHaven 2007-04-06 ch 3,	abuseWOW! I'm LOVING your story! maybe I shouldn't read this right before bed. Bad idea. Too late, oh well. I'll live. :D Next chapter anyone?
Viresse 2007-04-06 ch 3,	abusear, so both twins are in trouble. Can the demon be defeated? Even so, can the twins be saved? other than nightmares, any lasting effect on them? Will the twins suffer differently to these effects? Please update soon.
AWanderersHaven 2007-03-30 ch 2,	abuseWhoa! This is most likely the weirdest thing I have read! I like! More please.

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