Great Story!!

that was awesome! i need to know what happens next! update soon please. Also, are sora and kiari gong to confess and/or kiss anytime soon in this story? Update soon please.

F-R-E-D F-R-E-D-B-U-R-G-E-R, FRED FREDBURGER YES!

NO DAMN U AND UR CLIFFYS is it a kiss scene WHAT WHAT ARWE THEY GOING TO HAVE RANDOM ALIEN BABYS WTF I MUST KNOW AH lol once agin very good i like ur story and ur a hipacrite u review mine with critisism yet u hate it when people do it to u i see lol

SORA BETTER KIK SUM ** HE TO COOL TO BE PROTECTED ALL THE TIME LOL PLUS HE PWNS MAJORLY

lol so ya i finall decied i would read ur story but im in school so i dont have alot of time to review btu ya its good i liek it all rr the rest if i have time

o i hate you!! no i couldnt hate you for making such a good story!! but i hate cliffhangers.
anywho, UPDATE!! hehehehehe

Story: 4.5/10. You have some interesting ideas, but you don't do too good a job at introducing scene and setting which can make the fic confusing.

Characters: 5.75/10. You seem to have all the characters pretty IC, but you need to work on deepening character development in paragraphs.

Creativity: 4.5/10. The story seems pretty standard, but I'm not really sure where it is going.

Writing: 4.25/10. You don't have too many actual mistakes, but the fic is way too dialogue heavy. You don't use enough description or detail. Author's notes in the middle of stories are usually frowned upon. Also, I'm not sure why you are making entire chapters bolded or italicized.

Believability: 6/10. I have a feeling that this fic would be pretty believable if I could actually get any sort of concept of what was going on.

Overall: 5/10. You have a decent understanding of the characters, but your sparse writing style makes the story uninteresting and hard to understand.

When are you going to finish this story?

I LUV LUV LIV UR STORY! update soon!

Lol Funny, it was very, very funny. You and your bucket of water. Can I edit your chapters? Cause there were some errors, you know me, perfectionist. ^.^ I wonder whats happened to Kairi, questions, questions. THis means...

UPDATE ^.~