humor? you've got to be kidding me. a professor having an infatuation to an 11 year old? pervert.

gotta agree w/ borolin there...ew, other than thet, its cool! ^^

Very nice, but short :-)
cant you write a sequel - dreams come true ... please

o you should definitely keep spinning on this... Maybe skip ahead a few years but with recaps like memories of what's been inbetween... Me likey... :O) You could explain the acidity from him towards her as ways of him trying not to show these things that keep creeping into his dreams and so on... Potential... :o)

interesting

OK - it reads well and it's an interesting start. As a one-shot it feels a little too open-ended - I think it does need to be turned into a longer story, whether that's an epic romance or just another chapter or two discussing the probable meaning of the vision, and how that makes him feel about teaching her.

IMO it might be better to edit "Severus started and sat up straight as the girl, no woman, marched over to the stool" and make it something like "Severus started and sat up straight as the girl, no woman, a young woman of about twenty, marched over to the stool".

Itr's just that when you first read that paragraph it sounds as if he might be a paedophile, really ogling this eleven-year-old girl as if she was a sexually-mature adult. By the bottom of the page it's clear that that's not what's happening at all. On the one hand, maybe you want to keep readers in suspense over it for a few more paragraphs - but on the other hand it might put some readers off and cause them to hit the Back button before they've worked out what was happening.

you know you could make this into a story. it sounds really good. i thought you were but then i noticed that you had put this as complete. well i hope you decide to turn it into a story cause it would definitely