aw so cute!! i love it!! but they didnt kiss at the carnival...they just hugged...he didnt kiss her in the series ToT horrible i know...wah this made me cry its so cute! i love your writing and i really hope this doesnt turn into lemon... but rosette's kinda OOC...ah well its still really good

i liked it alot but the summerary made me cry T_T this is sad but good...i cant believe they died tho...*cries*

aw so cute! update soon hey...i luv this story...chrno is so cute!

Well, I read chapter 1 as you asked. I had seen Chrono Crusade a while ago but had forgotten some of the story points. Thanks for bringing them back to mind with this fine story.

And, Aion is sure sick, sick, sick, using the Savior's Words of surrender and desolation on Golgotha to describe his sickness. He belongs in the same level of Hell as my Ekogaru character in my SB works (Ekogaru is getting there someday, BTW, I just have a lot of story to write TO get him there).

The scenes between Rosette and Chrono, BTW, were very poignant and loving. I can't wait to read the rest of this story to see what happens during their limited time together before they die. Story's already been marked as one of my favorites, great writing from you as always...

--FREDDO

Update soon! I love it so far!

Cute! I like all of the 20's slang, it really seems to bring them alive and bring me into the past. However, some of it, such as names of people, are not familiar to me at all. Which means that I miss the jokes. So perhaps not so much mentioning names of people that were famous a long time ago, unless it's important to the story. Don't get me wrong, however, I LOVE what you've done so far.
Keep up the good work. I'll be back for the next chapter!

I apologize for having taken so long to review this my friend. You have created another wonderful chapter here. You are a true perfectionist, relying on the terms and slangs used in that day and age made for an enjoyable read. "Applesauce" indeed. I found myself smiling as the story progressed. Rosette is obviously on guard; I can see her creating a tale to anyone who questioned why she and Chrono were walking on that lone dirt road. But to such an extreme-That took me by surprise. I just hope that she didn't go overboard. Still Frank seems perfectly harmless and his motives don't appear to be anything else other than that of a good, decent man offering his help to some down and out kids. He offered them a place to stay, food, and clothes. Hopefully Rosette and Chrono can learn to trust him. The bedroom scene was so adorably sweet. Both wanting to express their feelings for each other but the timing wasn't right nor could they do so out of respect for Frank. This was exceptionally good. Please continue!

Rosette sure did do a good job of convincing the farmer to feel badly for her and Chrono. It was very nice of Frank to offer them a place to stay and then later the meal and clothes. I for one do know just what that means.
"A devil giving me etiquette lessons? Now that's rich." - That was a good one.
When Frank made the comment about Chrono looking like he had been chased out of hell by the devil made me think, if he only knew.
I'm glad that Rosette convinced Chrono not to leave even though he wasn't sure that he could trust himself. I really loved the way he fell asleep with her.
Once again, this was a fantastic piece by you.
Also, I sent you a response for your latest review. Thanks a lot, KSF. And, once again you did a wonderful job here. Jen

Aw!
Col!
Nice...
Godblezz on the works

I extreamly enjoyed this story. Very well written and thought out. You stick to the character's true personalities better then most authors; bravo! I can't wait to read more of this wonderful story; please keep up the great work your doing!

You did an excellent job of describing Michigan during that time period. And you certainly know how to write the feelings between a man and a woman! Great chapter, and I hope that Chrono and Rosette will be able to find the peace that they both so dearly seek and deserve.

Oh, this was amazingly sweet.

Chrono and Rosette are wonderfully in character here--the interaction between them before and after encountering the farmer seemed very much like them. Rosette being a little brash, and Chrono chiding her gently for treating the farmer like a rube. I also liked the conversation dealing with Chrono and Rosette's comparative/apparent ages--very funny, and at the same time, you could almost feel their frustration.

I can't wait for the next month!

Then what happens?

But really, how are you feeling, Rosette?”
[Missing opening quote marks.]

and the militia’s still around so I can transform back and we can both head over.”
[Missing comma after ‘around’ to separate what otherwise appears a relatively clear segment break in the sentence.]

Rosette could do no less for from the moment they first met he knew that is what her life’s mission always was,
[The phrasing in this sentence is disjointed. There are a number of different options, I recommend this, including removing the comma at the end:]
He knew from the moment they first met that Rosette could do no less, her life’s mission always was

and seeing them still alight with astral energy he retrieved them for a very specific use,
[I would start a new sentence at ‘seeing’. Don’t forget to place a comma to mark the sentence segment separation following ‘energy’.]

Then Aion in his despicable way informed them both that he had in fact given Chrono’s horns to someone else…
[Though this works technically, I think saying ‘already’ instead of ‘in fact’ would further emphasize Aion’s cruel planning and preparation, as well as his ability to read and manipulate people.]

Then came the piercing headaches that began with Joshua…
[This implies that the headaches affected Rosette, the last identified subject, and Joshua was the object that brought on the pains. Saying ‘plagued’ instead of ‘began with’ would fix that.]

Aion…that beast
[Missing closing comma to separate the thought from its thought tag.]

She turned and looked up into the still transformed full form of the demon
[Which might have acted as an indication that her life was still spiraling away.]

Chrono’s face, showing dismay at her action snapped to attention,
[Either phrase it ‘Chrono’s face showed dismay’ or add a comma after ‘action’ to clarify the interruptive segment of the sentence.]

pulling the crimson conductors forward.
[Weren’t Aion’s horns black?]

His eyes on the rapidly rotating hands of the contract watch he added as an afterthought,
[I think you intend that his eyes _fell_ on the watch.]

“So come with me as I say good-bye to her for the last time.”
[While the watch continues to siphon away Rosette’s life…]

I thought that was pretty well done, the writing was excellent with only a couple of missing commas. I was also impressed at how you handled the end, I’ve read so many obligatory kiss scenes that ring false that it was a pleasure to see this and know that it felt true to canon. Check out one of my stories some time.

God bless and happy writing,
Ganheim

oh wow! please please please do another chapter that was so sweet!! i loved it so much!! yay!! more chapters please!!