Great story, King. Keep on keepin on.

Good start, I like the way you describe things. I also loved the bit with Johnny Storm, that was clever :)
I'm going to guess that maybe English isn't your first language? It's just there are a few spelling mistakes but nothing major.
Enjoying it so far!

Hey, pally! Sorry it's taken so long...I was on an internet hiatus...don't ask.

The good:

-You may be complaining about how short it is, but DANG! Short just makes it easier to read your chappies in one sitting! I like it. (Okay, I'm on a wierd high right now.)

-"...Mistakes were made. Mostly me agreeing to work for this writer again." ...ROFLMAO. That was funny. I love you, Deadpool.

-I like Tombstone's portayal here. He's big, he's mean, he's scary, Awsome showing, chap.

The bad: Nothing!

Comments: Update soon! :D

WHAT TOOK YA SO LONG?!

Okay! There are a couple things I REALLY should've told you about last time, espescially since you requested it, and I apologize. I have a PM waiting, just wait a couple of seconds after this review!

The Good: I love J.J. I don't know what it is, but I just love him. The part where Betty attempted an 'almost' flirt with Peter, then learned he was only sixteen...that was just GOLD! (I remember back in USM when Black-Cat found out Spidey was a kid...poor kid spent HOURS getting the vomit off his...er...crotch area. ;D) Anyways...DEADPOOL! If Spidey wasn't already my favorite Super from Marvel, it would be him, and this chapter clearly shows why! I love him! Finally, My friend, this chapter seems just right. Not too long, not too short, but just right. Kudos!

The Bad: Twice, you spelled 'Jonah' as 'Johan.' Once after Jonah yells "BLOOD PRESSURE BE-!" And again when Robbie says "JOHAN isn't normally like that, it's just that-"...

Comments: I'm not sure how the relationship between Otto and Curt could go. If you re-worked them to be both Physicists or Biologists, then it could go alright. Otherwise, how could two scientists from two TOTALLY different fields of experience work together harmoniously? Meh, I await your answer and your next update!

Oh my! This chapter seems to pave the way to others!! Love it, and better continue!

This is a fantastic AU fic. I love the fight scenes. When are you going to update this?

Gwen has black hair?! Sacrilege! Sacrilege!

All kidding aside, the story seems to be going on at a good clip. Your description of the high school cafeteria was particularly well done. The little bit with Curt Conners sounded a little too frustrated but that may have just me being a bit surprised that Curt was in Pete's high school. Something tells me you're already planning on bringing a MJ/Peter relationship into the picture, which is fine so long as you work well into it.

Well, you certainly set up a background for the characters you're going to be using, which is good when you're preparing to launch into an AU story. I grew up with reprints of early Spiderman issues so I always like to read a story with a Gwen and Peter relationship. The Osborn/Kingpin plot also has a bit of intrigue on it as well.

The only real concern I had with this chapter is that it may have provided a little too much exposition. Describing your characters is one thing but you also have to make sure to create a story around it so people will want to read about the characters. Of course, that's also what the next few chapters are for, aren't they?

another great chapter!

Alright, here is my review.

The good: I enjoy the over-all plot of this chapter. The part where DareDevil blows up the drug store-houses, as well as Peter and Georges conversation was absolute GOLD.

The bad: There are instances where it feels as if you forgot a word, or forgot a letter at the end or used the wrong word. I would give you a list of examples, but I'm being lazy. Sorry...

Comments: Another excellent chapter, my friend. How's UDP going, and when's Dresari going to make an appearance.

Ah, here we go!

The good: As for an intermission chapter, this is okay. Standard praise for this chapter regarding punctuation, grammer and spelling. Everyone was in character, and I liked Peter's section of the chapter best. (*poink!* Ow! :D)

The bad: Each section was to short. I would've liked to have seen an extension of Captain Stacy's segment.

Comments: Could you send me the format of the 'creat a character' form for Ultimate Danny Phantom? Also, update soon.

Excellent

I just started reading your fanfic getting all the way up to the beginning of your "Get a Hair Cuy and Get a Real Job" arc and I have come to a conclusion. I hate you. Aside from the occasional spelling or grammatical error, you've crafted an amazing piece of work with detailed characters, intricate plots, incredible action, and now I am hooked. You threw out the bait, let me get a little nibble and now here I am hooked on you fanfic patiently waiting for you to reel the line in and post the next part of the arc. I really hate you. But hate aside please hurry and post the next part because this is really incredible. The only thing that I had an issue with was Peter using four letter language after becoming upset with Norman in the hospital. That just seemed a bit out of character to me. Other than that keep up the great work!

Dude, I really love your story. Keep updating, it's great.