AWW! i think u should of kept going with twilight coz ur ideas are AMAZING and different to everyone elses...or are u going to continue writing under a different category/movie/book/etc.?

good story! except i thought that when they reconciled, it was a bit too quick, but it was still good! :)

Okay, this is different, but I love it!

aw
i was crying at the end,it was so sweet
i love your writing style
from jessie

I liked your story. You were right though, the ending was a little happy and mushy, but I think for a story with so much drama you needed a nice and gushy ending. :)

This was a good story.

I'm sorry, I know that some people have already make their suggestions for your French in the first chapter, and that you apparently didn't change it (but there were anyway mistakes in their suggestions, sorry guys), and the world surely doesn't care, but I'm French and I love my language, so I have to post the correct translation, even if it's maybe in vain :

"Que regardez-vous, Edward" ('fixement' is here unnecessary)
"Je ne fais qu'apprécier cette magnifique journée, Mme Cake"
"Merveilleux. Maintenant, pourquoi ne descendez-vous pas de votre nuage pour apprécier la leçon que le gouvernement vous paie gracieusement?"
"Avec tout le respect que je vous dois, Madame, je connais déjà tout ce que vous enseignez dans cette classe, et je préfère nettement regarder les nuages plutôt que de vous écouter essayer de m'apprendre quelque chose que je connais déjà."

Because it's only the first chapter, I don't really have something to say. Just that it's quite interesting and I will now read the rest =)

Great story!

But what was Bella's power anyway?

wow different but still cool and ya u have a point about midnight sun thouggh i wish she would publish it even if she did leak it herself or not lol anyways very ironic on bella going to italy instead of edward are u going to make a sequel

Loved it! I lvod al of it and the ending rocks. Only one thing I have to point out.

If both Bella's Coven and Edward's Coven live near eachother and go to the same school, surely the families would have met? I mean, the cullens could smell Bella's coven and everything but no one but bella and edward spoke? Pretty far-fetchd...

But! I loved everything and i loved how Bella doesn't just go running into Edward's arms. She is actually angry. You are a very good writer and i love this plot. =]

ouch. french burn! lmao

Well, let's review the story first shall we?

I liked the fic well enough... it was well written, and I liked how it ended. And the whole "mother" thing with Jalin... amusing.

Now, on to the rant.

I agree with you about Breaking Dawn... it was stupid. Jacob's character got ruined, Bella became an even greater Mary Sue, and the whole thing was pointless.

And SM made me mad... so her manuscript got posted online, fine. And it's reasonable to postpone the book for a short amount of time... but putting the manuscript up and whining about it?! That's too much...

Anyway, just don't abandon your account yet. Even if you renounced Twilight, there are still other fandoms to write about... there are other fandoms in your interest, right? ^.^

L O V E I T ! ! ! ! !

yea, it was a bit sickeningly-sweet!
But okay!!

that rant was so true. and honestly...i hated Breaking dawn. the twilight series is just over and everyone needs to except it. Stephenie's just trying to get as famous as possible and i can never respect her like I do most authors. also would u mind telling me what inspired your nickname? it sounds really cool. (and don't worry, no stealing from me)