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| Port of Seas 2008-07-02 ch 4, anon. | abuseWow. Sheppard watches Firefly. Brilliant. |
| Space1Traveler 2008-06-26 ch 9, | abuse10 Hankies, hands down. Did you ever write the sequel and what is the name of it? If you didn't, how about a little of all three of your suggestions, earth, Athosians, and Atlantis. A kind of recovery journey for the team. Maybe with a little of Atlantis herself to help John in his recovery and to get over the feeling of being the weak link that he harbored for so long. Now about this fic: I am speechless (almost, as usual, LOL). You have again enthralled me with high adventure, fear, excitement, laughter, and relief. I could hear my self echoing the "Ah craps" of the team when a new obstacle appeared and sighing with relief when the danger was passed. All the wonderful things I said about your other stories apply here and then multiply it by 5. You write like a television episode. I can see the camera moving around and the lighting with its dark shadows, the snow swirling around their numb feet as they move slowly on their way to the gate. Every face was clearly portrayed to my eye and every smelly breathe made me want to hold my nose. I thought I would throw up when they were looking for John's body and when they passed the ravine of carcasses. Their personal struggles were heart-rending. When I read your fiction and some select others, I only love the team more. What a gift you have and I thank you for sharing it with me and I thank God I found fan fiction and came to know you through it. Write on, Stealth Dragon and I follow you gladly through any Startgate or to any planet. |
| CazzBlade 2008-05-27 ch 9, | abuseWonderfull! All the way through, it was magnificent :D The concern for each other was perfect! For the healing, I'd like to hear more of Atlantis' reaction to them returning :) |
| Isobel Kelte 2008-05-15 ch 9, | abuseI'm rather in awe after reading this in one sitting. Would it even been possible to put it down? Honestly, the thing that drew me in from the beginning was the writing style. You didn't simply describe a scene or emotion: you painted them. Without coming across as showy you manage to make the reader vividly feel the pounding terror, the swamping despair, or the fleeting stabs of joy. There are a few grammar/spelling errors here and there, but with a writing of this length it's all but impossible to avoid. |
| Random 2008-05-13 ch 1, anon. | abuseHi. I think this story, overall, is very good. However, I think it could be really excellent if it were run through a good beta. There are a few spelling errors throughout and a few out of character moments that kind of jar the flow of the story. But like I said, very good as is, just could use a bit of smoothing out. |
| Estel's Maiden 2008-03-28 ch 7, | abuseThis entire tale has been like riding a roller coaster that is out of control... LOL and speaking of LOL, I could not stop laughing at Rodney's remarks to Sheppard: “Ronon. And if you say anything about this to him I'm going to say it was all you and that you're just trying to cover your own **.” ROFL... poor Sheppard Thank you once again for some ~~very~~ creative writing... I feel compelled to add your username to my list of favorite authors... :-) |
| donttouch 2008-02-13 ch 9, | abuseOMG, can't believe how long it took me to find this, I've already read it, once, and loved it! Simply loved it! Good work! |
| Astraldust 2007-11-03 ch 9, | abuseFantastic story from start to finish. The team went through hell but I loved the way they helped each to overcome their fears and emotion problems. |
| Astraldust 2007-10-29 ch 2, | abuseI'm just starting to read this wonderful story and look forward to reading the rest when I can find the time. |
| Renegade.Ranger 2007-10-15 ch 9, | abusewow, it was excellent! :) A tag for this story would be great, although I'm not sure myself which would be best, going to earth or staying in Atlantis. Hm... a toughy there. But I'm sure which ever one you choose to write will be great! |
| PrincessPatrice 2007-10-13 ch 9, | abuseGreat story as always. I would love to see them go to earth for some R&R. Or maybe a stay with the Athosians that causes a bit more whump and then a forced return to earth for some R&R maybe with Carson to take care of the injured person(s)(john!). Please continue with your wonderful stories i love em all |
| jack_rocks 2007-10-13 ch 9, anon. | abuseThe finale was perfect!! I loved this story so much and I really would like to read a sequel... maybe on Athos? Whatever you decide is fine by me. Thanks for sharing it. |
| HollyMarieL 2007-10-12 ch 9, | abuseThis was an awesome story. While my first inclination is that sending them back to Earth might be fun, based on their current states in the story, I'd think that'd be too overwhelming for Ronon and Teyla. They'd do better in more familiar surroundings. Sending them to hang with the Athosians has some cool possibilities. No matter what, I'm sure the story will be good. Thanks for writing such a wonderful story! |
| mtee1958 2007-10-12 ch 9, | abuseSuch a great story. I don't think I would vote for an Earth visit. I'd love to have a tag though. Somewhere with a beach - for John! |
| Delka 2007-10-11 ch 9, | abuseFine story. You could go a fews with th next project. But I'd say something with R and R for sure. |